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My secret

These feelings that I keep,
Locked here in my secret heart,
If I confessed them to you now,
Would it drive us apart?

And if I leave the truth unsaid
Would you see it in my eyes?
You would guess my secret then.
There'd be no way to disguise.

I long to hold you, can't you see,
My heart aches to be with you.
I want to write it in the stars.
Could you love me too?




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  • Remix Factory
    October 6

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    guud poem, i lik da thougst ya hav behind it. alot of human beings hav those thougs of luv too. so it was very human and grea8 rite. dis i mention lovely? ummm now i did.


  • Alex Fitzpatrick
    August 21

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    Very touching

    This is a lovely poem, in that it expresses true emotion. I do like it, but at the same time, I feel that keeping love a secret is like hiding your light under a basket.


  • awannabepoet
    August 17

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    Love is what it is and it does not like to be kept a secret for surely your eyes will betray you.

    I do like the poem as it is for in it you give of your deepest emotions and desires and for that I thank you for sharing it.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    August 10

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    Secrets like this should not be hidden;I love however the question you ask....If I confessed..would it drive us apart? That is a question even the stars may not tell.
    Love whether secret or not when felt is Magical and can be seen on just one's eyes for they are the windows of one soul....Good luck with your quest....


  • melphleg gold member
    August 6

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    Response

    The feelings we mutually share
    Will remain forever in our heart
    I yearn to join body and soul bare
    But we must sadly remain apart

    Yet I cannot leave the truth unsaid
    My desire can be seen in my eyes
    I am lonely in my empty bed
    My love and lust, I cannot disguise

    I long to embrace you and not let go
    My heart aches each time I see your face
    You are a part of my very soul
    I love you my dear messenger of grace


    Gracy, I understand the longing and fears expressed in this piece. When I first read it, it nearly made me cry and created such a longing to love and be loved. My poem response expresses similar desires, feelings, fears etc. Sometimes, I'm torn between what is my hearts desire and what I know is good and right. Over the years I've loved many people as friends but have never found that one true romantic love. Each time I think the door is open to the possibility, it is slammed in my face. I long for intimacy, both physical and spiritual - the kind of intimacy that arises from knowing another, joining hearts and souls as well as bodies.

  • Bob Fox
    August 6

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    LOVE

    The desires to say the words and yet the fear of rejection penned so well in your poetry of perfect rhyme. well done young poet.

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