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Colorless Heart




Alabaster flawless,
perched with ruby fullness
as stolen breath beats
to chance

with tendrils long,
twirling upon winds,
lost between whispers

shared

releasing sighs,
reliving regret
as riots rage
to relinquish ache

for true colors became clear,
yet shadowed by ruse,

masquerading your love
once again~

 

 

 

 







 

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Prompt: "the color is still gray"

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  • anaisnais
    December 2, 2009

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    Love the depth and meaning felt from each and evey word you have written here, so carefully selelcted to paint vivid impressionto readers mind. Hugs oxo


  • Sonja
    September 3, 2009

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    This is great to read and so deep feelings are expressed within your words. Even the title captured my attention from the very first moment when I saw it. Take care dear friend. All colors will be back again.
    ~Sonja~


  • Legend silver member
    August 15, 2009

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    If all the Grey days of mine shone as brightly as this piece does I would gladly welcome them
    Excellent


  • PerfectImperfection
    August 4, 2009

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    This is such a very beautiful piece of love's requiem - the pain, and beauty meshed in memory. Great use of imagery and thoughtful depth. Very well penned!!!


  • Samplicity
    August 4, 2009

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    It seems that gray is always misunderstood as a color. But I think you've used these words so well to describe it. And it's still one of my favorite colors. Very nice write, keep up the great work.
    And sorry that it's been a while.


  • moonbumps silver member
    August 2, 2009
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    A masterly free write but such finesse-perfect
    Hilly x


    • jasminerose
      August 2, 2009
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      Sweet Hilly xoxo Thank you so very much for the lovely compliment dear heart!!!
      Always a pleasure to hear from you!!!! sssss
      Linda
      ps.. how was the burfday??


  • crivanea
    August 1, 2009

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    beautiful lines..beautiful flows..and such lovely word choice...you bring life to the color gray..this is very well written...nicely done ..the second stanza is my fav


    • jasminerose
      August 2, 2009
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      Thank you crivanea for hosting this very inspiring contest! I appreciate your wonderful compliment as I found my pen flowing along from its dormant state due to the inspiration you have given!
      Thank you!!!
      Jazzy


  • justgot2loveme
    July 31, 2009

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    lovely piece for the prompt,
    your ending was magnificent.

    i've miss reading you, i must come by more often.

    justgot2loveme


    • jasminerose
      August 2, 2009
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      Ahh my friend, how wonderful to hear from you!!! Thank you for your lovely words and I am missing you and your lovely poems!!!
      Thank you for the smiles
      Linda

  • msjuicytech
    July 31, 2009

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    Sums it all up...

    "for true colors became clear,
    yet shadowed by ruse,
    masquerading your love
    once again~"
    This is exquisite ;-) it sums this wonderful piece all up!!


    • jasminerose
      August 2, 2009
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      Thank you so very much for such a lovely compliment on my entry~ such a pleasure this was to receive!
      Thank you!!
      Jazzy

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