Us innocent kids need your help
Instead of us walking around looking for someone to love us
We need you to show and tell us
What is right from wrong
And weak from strong
Because that’s a lot to learn.
This wont take you long
Only if you be passionate and stay strong.
We make mistakes.
and at the end we make progress
But we will meet success.
Unless you are not willing to help
Because you know you will get stressed.
We may not know a lot
But we can express and impress you.
We may be undressed,
We may not be blessed
But we are also not guests
But I must agree that we are always stressed.
This Is our country
Even though It seems like we are unwanted
But we aren’t going to leave it
Not just because we are in poverty
But because it is our be loving country.
Author notes
am nearly 14 years old female
What do you think about this poem I wrote with my sister???
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Excellent writing
All people, children and adults, need support.
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"What is right from wrong
And weak from strong
Because that’s a lot to learn."
From the great movie, TO SIR WITH LOVE.
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Terrific
This is a poem written from the heart, sadly it is all too true of what is happening today. So many children have no support from so called family.They feel let down disillusioned,noone wants to hear what they say,they feel so alone.Every one responds to love
human or animal.Too many adults are selfish & just thoughtless
A lovely write from the heart
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You have certainly captured the plight and helplessness of children in need here. it is a very touching write and is well done.
AnnD
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This is pretty good. IN the last line "Be loving" should be "beloved" that would sound a lot better. Other than that, this is a very good piece... and very true. Keep up your great work.
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I liked it a lot
but you over used some words, its a great work though just look up some synonyms on the tool bar to the right when you are writing GREAT POEM!!
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Hey, I wrote this myself please tell me what you think
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