I can't save Henry's ass,
not that I would,
in the new world
evening shatters the silence,
he had already stripped it bare-
Love being the last ornament,
save for Henry spinning in the breeze,
Lollygag, another dead prophet
face blue and there's an end to the visions,
another odd blue moon at the end of July
comes up over the tree line
coughs up light,
not that it hurts that much in the starshine,
rest of us have to wait
till the words cease to boil
let the heat abate in the coil,
lengthwise,
as though we could hear a breeze
but not straining rope.
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I love the way you have used the words in ways that create new images eg the moon 'coughs up light' .
'Henry spinning in the breeze ' puts me in mind of soundless wind chimes Sadly, I do not have the context so it was a little lacking in meaning for me, but that you were able to engage me despite this is a great effort.
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well hung
Henry . . . . Luce? rhymes with Truth (sorta)? doesn't matter, (higgins? no?) anyway . . . love the 'end of visions', 'end of july', end of the rope (abbot?) ... -danglingphish
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Interesting!
This is a very interesting write. I think one would have to know the background to fully appreciate he symbolism. Enjoyable nonetheless.
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I'm sorry!
I didn't understand this poem it was a little heavy for me and that you have my honesty and always will better luck next time with a different poem .But at least you have alot of others that do and I'm sure I have a few poems that have done the same to many of my veiwers but I'm okay with that and I understand. it's far better to be honest and up front with your family members here they will grow to admire and respect your honesty.I did love your other poem it was absouloutly beautiful and that is from the bottom of my heart.
Blessings!
Sharon
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You expressed yourself well. I am sorry my comment isn't as indepth as the rest. I am tired lol but you did a good job and you got your point across. Good write.
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The media stretches the truth until it's close to breaking point, some think it's always the truth, like lambs to the slaughter, others take the time to see the innuendo's and half truths and perhaps find out fore themselves.
C
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the joys of journalism
skewing metaphor and interpreting silence
a messianic effort for reality show audience
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