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My first words, after our first kiss.

Missing image

 

 

I would write poetry for you,

as passion kindled anew

 

it was though I had huddled next to a fire

surrounded by frigid wilderness,

my heartbeat thundered

amongst snow crested trees

as verse not yet written

echoed in my mind.

 

Now, I cast gifts of words at your feet

for I have little more

and this is a fortune you say.

 

Day becomes night, night becomes day,

turning to years, feeling your touch, a brushing

of my soul, with loving preservation.

 

I pray this flame never dies.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Author notes

"I am the ultramarine heatin the center of the flame -your affection the spark

that triggered this fire" - Alice J. Baldwin (Auburn Sunrise)

 

 

Camp fire by Diles Found on flickr 

 

 

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  • vivuyo
    November 15
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    your poem is very delicate and romantic.
    you have able to conjugate your emotions through words, and your words express your emotions.

    all i can say is --a very fine composition.
    congrats!!

  • SuzieJ silver member
    November 13
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    Moving

    MJ. Words are a gift and you used them so honestly and beautifully! Thank you.


  • mea-masako
    November 12
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    so romantic!! indeed you're a great poet !!


  • Nyafushia gold member
    October 28

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    This flowed smoothly with feeling and grace. Such feelings flame the fires of passion and yet are soothing to the soul. Your poetic graces are a gift to feel.
    Thank you deeply,
    Anya


  • wwfhrocks14
    October 27

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    wow no wonder you have so many gold trophies this is more amazing on the reread and i look forward to reading more of your work. very unique style, it's traditional yet relatable. the best of both worlds.


  • Edie gold member
    September 24

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    "Now, I cast gifts of words at your feet
    for I have little more
    and this is a fortune you say."

    This is so romantic and smooth flowing. Its also something a poet can relate to in a very personal way.
    Well done.


  • Ez Writer silver member
    September 19

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    Ahh , beautifully penned Michael !!
    A Charming , passionate and touching write .
    Flows like gentle stream - to read a delight !
    Best regards , Friend Easy

  • LadyOfTheFox
    September 16

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    <3 Heartfilledpoemyougotthere.

    Very well written, thought it was beautiful, used your words wisely. Well done.


  • xxuglyducklingxx
    September 5

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    Beautifully Penned.

    This was a divine write. So beautifully laced with solid metaphors and silencing imagery. I loved it. My only critique is line 3, I think it could be more metaphorical in order to accent the imagery but I also find myself overlooking it because the poem is so beautiful. Please keep writing, you've got talent my friend.


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      September 5

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      Why thank you, how very kind and generous of you.


      • xxuglyducklingxx
        September 5
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        Please, Don't thank me.

        I thank you, so much for writing it and even more posting it. It inspired me


  • crivanea silver member
    September 2

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    did i ever mention how much i love the way you write i'm sure i did..but if you didn't catch the memo..maybe these will answer... beautiful lines...and the ending was s t u n n i n g! oh..didn't know you're from Alaska beautiful background page ...if i ever visit..i'll let you know [yes..i'm a big daddy's girl ]

    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      September 2
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      Aw, you are soooo sweet!

      I'd love to show you around Anchorage and the surrounding area.

      Took the photos myself, I’m also a photographer.


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    August 5

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    I love this, my dearest brother

    What great imagery!

    Line 3 felt kind of awkward to me - I'm not really sure why or what would improve it... just an observation.

    Otherwise, I'm impressed as ALWAYS

    I honestly thought that pic was by you until I read the author's notes. I was going to tell you what a great picture you took, but... that's a great picture you found! LOL


  • robena
    July 31
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    this is sincere and very heartfelt piece. i just love every part


  • Nicolette gold member
    July 31

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    this is so very lovely. one of my favourite sayings is "sit at the fires of gentle souls"...and this is just what you've pressed here against this page, MJ. I have a thing for fires, staring into them, sitting fireside, etc... a poem to warm the hands of heart by

    ~ Nicolette


  • BlancetNoir gold member
    July 30

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    lovely, heartfelt and sincere. this is very sweet. I wonder how many people read this and think, Gah, I wish someone were writing me such sweet verse...


  • Emmyb gold member
    July 30
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    x x x x

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