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Erinyes - the Furies

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'The Remorse of Orestes' by William- Adolphe Bouguereau (1825-1905)  

 

Translated from the original Latin text.

 

 

Excerpt from my play, 'Death by Virtue' & Epic poem, Eos, vol ii;

 

A psychiatric assessment of  William has been made by Asha,

His awareness was already known of this by the very last line,

remembering that these are his words, not hers.

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Act 5; Scene 1: 

In the consultant's quarters 

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Asha

 

His emerge from the moment of inherit,
as the alter-base state cradle's one's merit
evolving from the invite of our forefathers
insisting such a godless insight to ferret!

Who, with alteration exceeds embrace,
over that fury as we do, once in a trace
to masquerade the initial panic to calm,
a senseless balm, numbing for it to replace!  

As harbinger to the alleged wait,
once in a while, a hint of the languid state
shall tease retribution from its soul host,
as lurking in one's labyrinth of hate!

Not to diminish that a trace of gore-
shall inherit one significant whore
to whom apparel has entranced us by,
becomes aphrodisiac to that of lore!

Tamed by the mercy of blood dropped,
we consume by misadventure from an opt;
of lame excuse for the echo to dwindle
as one of make-believe for myth to adopt!

No more supplied as Erinyes from it throes
as I am depicted phantom for one's decompose,
answered as nature's cause for an intention
soul seeker to which vengeance from it grows!

Wreathed by serpents more like anchor men;
astounds those strengths brought masterful
against self awareness of a keenly svelte when
indeterminate a capacity known as the omen!

With a psyche, there is the mind of illusion,
overpowered by the echo merely by intrusion
narcistic by all means by constant threat,
be well intentioned though more a delusion!

He has a velvet feel for the words he'd free!
though to saunter woods it is keenly by me
a three pronged charactered triptych graph,
shows more an unceasing, grudging banshee!

To transform without warning, not to fufill
heredity cause by the nature of Gods will
more sinister creatures than first envisaged
yet, I seem to exist more as a "luscious ill".

There is 'macabre' written all over the place,
a once filled entrance by the beautiful race
acquired in them days to exorcise what rage
spread by the delight of a frenzied displace!

'Alecto', 'Megaera', I recall was Virgil's Aeneid,
making his a dance with death owes this tirade
as a trilogy of sorts overwrought by it mystic
more derisory, worthless grin of the betrayed!

I whither way with this a cautionary measure,
do, with intention, read allowed at leisure,
the thoughts of my assessment as one of late,
intention it to the delight of one's pleasure!

Author notes

The exclamations are intentional, as a matter for shock than anything else.
Plus the Erinyes are female traits tearing his soul to shreds.

All the word bank used:
Word Bank
Echo
Aphrodisiac
Labyrinth
Narcissistic
Panic
Psyche
Languid
Velvet
Saunter
Transform
Gore
Luscious
Illusion
Macabre
Entranced
Delight
Spread
Phantom
Decompose
Dance
Trace
Fulfill
Harbinger
Cradle
Embrace
Dwindle
Emerge
Whither
Alteration
Altar
Mystic
Intention

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  • sidewinder silver member
    August 13
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    my work compared to yours.. seems amateurish.
    maybe one day I can be half as good as you are.
    well said my friend!
    Bill

  • WOW! this was amazing! You had such great emotions and imagery in this. Great choices of words! You painted a wonderful picture in the reader's mind. BRAVO! good luck in the contest.

  • Wonderful use of the words from the list given! I didn't mind the exclamations at all. I felt that they added to the impression of the poem. Through the exquisite wording I could see the painting above playing out before my eyes. A wonderfully put together piece, that through the beauty of the words made such a scene a joy to read. Thank you for entering and good luck!

  • There are few poets who could take this word bank and transform it into a masterpiece
    so well penned with perfect rhythm and rhyme and yet still have it make sense, but you my dear
    have demonstrated that it can be done and you have done a masterful job in doing so.

    This was an enthralling tale from beginning to end crafted with beautiful language and
    heightened by the wonderful imagery and metaphoric values throughout.

    This truely is a masterpiece my dear friend and I surely hope the contest host recognizes that when it comes to judging time. It sets the bar quite high in my personal opinion and although I think your talent alone should soar you straight to the top, I will however take the time to wish you the best of luck in this contest. Good luck my gentle friend... I wish you the best!

    Huge hugs and kisses,

    Suzi


  • shiratikva
    July 30

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    I see here adorable rhyming scheme.
    "velvet feel for the words" nice methaphor my friend.
    This is a great piece of your puzzle work....
    Loved it

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