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Seeking
My righteous self
But cannot find my way.
I try and try, but left astray.
Seems as though I always take the wrong path.
My fingers cannot do the math
Of the times that I've failed.
So I set sail;
Seeking
Author notes
Word Prompt: Seeking
RICTAMETER
A rictameter is a nine line poetry form. The 1st and last lines are the same with the syllable count as follows:
line 1 - 2 syllables - same as line 9
line 2 - 4 syllables
line 3 - 6 syllables
line 4 - 8 syllables
line 5 - 10 syllables
line 6 - 8 syllables
line 7 - 6 syllables
line 8 - 4 syllables
line 9 - 2 syllables - same as line 1
In a list
A contest entry
- Prewrites :) Yes, as many as you like, but hell this wont be simple. by xxRainbowDawnxx.
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i enjoyed this well done x
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thanks...it was a nice form and something i would try soon...good luck
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Stunning piece; few words with a big impact on the reader.
There isn't anything I don't love about it!
bravo and thank you for entering
♥ kate -
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very spiritual and very inspiring piece, i've not done a rictameter before but i'm aware of this form and it seems to me you pulled it off perfectly!
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Nice job with the form. Since all entries are bound by the syllable count, as a judge I must find other criteria and part of that would be the shape and word choice. How it all comes together at the end ... nice job.
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it would be much easier if it was written somewhere.. trying to find yourself or seeking for something better of yourself can take you places and spaces that you might not wanna venture, then you have the doubts and conflicts.. am i doing the right thing or not.. but doubts and conflicts and despair is good, only that will take you deeper to what you search for nothing else.
this is a Sufi poem i like.
Let sorrowful longing dwell in your heart, never give up, never losing hope. The Beloved says, "The broken ones are My darlings." Crush your heart, be broken.
(The Beloved in another word for God)
as you can see, your piece resonates with me. thank you for sharing it.
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Awwh, thank you for such lovely feedback as well as new knowledge:
"The broken ones are My darlings."
I have yet to memorize and finish reading His words. On this journey, each day I find myself learning more and more. Again thank you
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Wow, great write, I like the form and the choice of words. I like your style, keep writing
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Thank you sweetie.
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Awesome piece, short but powerful, well-constructed; makes me want to write form poetry again...I stopped doing form poetry some time ago
Beautifully done
Vito
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Awwh, thank you. This is my second form poetry Ive ever done. I really enjoy writing like this, but dont want to do too many. I'll just call these my snacks. Cant eat too many of them or they'll make me sick LOl!
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our falling failing human form.... so very well addressed. love you use of poetic form speaking to the search.
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Thank you Rick. I am glad you liked it. Rictameters are so fun yet so challenging.
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Wow...
Zena this piece speaks volumes.
There's so much inside your words.
It's a very poignant poem that evokes
reflection on such a deep deep level.
I love where you come from.
your poetry speaks to me.
I really like it alot. Great work here
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Thank you for another wonderful comment. I am trying to write different styles of poetry and expand myself.
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First of all the name attracted me to come here to read the peom
then i found the beautiful shape
I have started reading and found that its great
Its really well constructed and it has its own appeal and expression
I love the total poem cause the picture is really well matched too..
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Thank you. Out of the words we had to choose from, "seeking" caught my attention as well.
darkness
falling
calling
autumn
raining
blending
torture
breezes
amaze
thunder
seeking
I am glad you enjoyed it. Honestly, I didnt think I'd have too many responses. So again, I thank you.
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Very good write
Short but so heart felt you are a true poet and your words flow with the rhyme
looks like I have another favorite. Keep writing dear heart !
Blessing
Sharon
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Thank you Sharon! I will be sure to return the favor shortly.
I am glad you enjoyed it.
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Wow I know this feeling for sure! It's hard to find your way when everything is so clouded and distorted. I think it's because some asshole out there keeps changing the signs so we will get lost lol. Also when every road looks the same, how are you to know until you get to the end of it which one you have taken or should take? Great expression!
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Hey, I like that: "when every road looks the same, how are you to know until you get to the end of it which one you have taken or should take? " Wonderful quote!
Thank you for your warm comments and for my quote of the day
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lol I guess it is kind of a good quote eh?
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i like the way this piece shapes up...beginning and ending with the same word. is that what a rictameter is?
I'm afraid I know very little about proper poetry...I'm getting better though. this site is a great inspiration because of poets like you!! thanks for sharing!! good luck with the contest!! peace and light! Kendal
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Thank you
Yes, this is a Rictameter. A rictameter is a nine line poetry form. The 1st and last lines are the same with the syllable count as follows:
line 1 - 2 syllables - same as line 9
line 2 - 4 syllables
line 3 - 6 syllables
line 4 - 8 syllables
line 5 - 10 syllables
line 6 - 8 syllables
line 7 - 6 syllables
line 8 - 4 syllables
line 9 - 2 syllables - same as line 1
If you would like to learn some different styles of poetry, you might want to go here if you dont already know them: http://allpoetry.com/class
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This painted a picture in my head! good luck in the contest.
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Awwh...Thank you!
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