the ballerina want-to-be
her minds made up it's plain to see
determination on her face
she dances with much style and grace
flower adorns her flaxen hair
she flits about without a care
and floats around with fringe of lace
she dances with much style and grace
upon her toes for pirouette
she pushes on without regret
one day her fame fans will embrace
she dances with much style and grace
Author notes
Screen name: Haiku-bless-you
Inspired by picture prompt:
http://pretty-as-a-picture.deviantart.com/art/ballerina-toes-95133789
Form: Kyrielle
A Kyrielle is a French form of rhyming poetry written in quatrains (a stanza consisting of 4 lines),
and each quatrain contains a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last
line of each stanza). Each line within the poem consists of only eight syllables. There is no limit
to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum.
Some popular rhyming schemes for a Kyrielle are: aabB, ccbB, ddbB, with B being the repeated
line, or abaB, cbcB, dbdB.
A contest entry
- & je danserais pour toi {pic inspired, many forms} by ZachP.
400 points, ended August 6, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Can you relate to this?
Comments
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This is a beautiful and sweet rhyme; and I love this poem. There something,though, that I (being extrordinarily nitpicky) want to point out.
* punctuation -- while it's a poet's right to choose their punctuation, I feel that I really helps moderate the flow. Same with capital letters, that stick out to the eye; and help establish a footing, so to say.
Follows Rules => 10/10
Rhythm & Rhyme => 7/10
Je ne sais quoi* => 7/10
Vocabulary => 7/10
Poetic Devices => 8/10
Total: 39.0
Well done! -
ballerina wanna be ... reminds me of a child. Beautiful rhyme.
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Without any picture you vividly paint the dancer, pirouetting, twirling on her toes....So nicely done in your Kyrielle...
write! 
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