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~Yours~

Missing image

 

 

 

 

 

 

The first time

I felt your kiss, it wasn’t

upon my lips that such a

kiss was placed.

 

 

 

 

It came in tender

moments, like butterflies

softly touching, wooing

me to love

 

 

 

 and I did.

　

 

 

A gradual climb,

above the mountains to

the skies we bathed

in moon-lit nights.

　

 

 

I breathed essence of

you that ~sighed~

 

 

 

My love...

 

 

 

 

I am 

undeniably

yours.

 

 

     　

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  • humblpye gold member
    November 12

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    Ah yes...the heart of a woman!
    I simply love these words, for this is how a woman feels and senses love...so romantic and dreamlike...how the expressions between a man and a woman differ, even tho they both feel the same emotion...yin and yang huh!

    Well done
    John

  • Eusebius
    October 28
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    Sweet, soft, short, sparse yet potent and highly romantical, indeed! A fine and well thoughtout write here... loved it!!!

  • Dreamwithme gold member
    October 19

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    Really wonderful piece - filled with warm and beautiful imagery, it communicates this wonderful vision of your love with amazing clarity.


  • mcjb38 silver member
    October 5
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    I love this

    Simply worded-yet charged with emotion! Who does the artwok? It fits beautifully...

  • rick butler gold member
    October 4

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    Love the soul of the heart ! Wonderful expression of feelings that use words as imaginary preoccupations the ending is giving of oneself to another with all thy heart " LOVE "


  • daviscth silver member
    September 11

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    Congratulations on your bronze cup dear. This poem has such beautiful flowing imagery in the lines. It reminds me of a fluffy white cloud or sitting on a rainbow or something precious like a wedding ring. Thanks so much for sharing.


  • Rick Weston silver member
    August 30

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    i like the soft tender feel of this confession of love. a lovely poem, so inviting to read. nicely done.

    rick


  • Lulu Gee silver member
    August 26
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    A very warm poem, bursting with emotion....Well done on the bronze...Lu


  • penman gold member
    August 15
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    Excellent

    wow, such a joy to read. And so well worded. Congratulations on the bronze. It was so well deserved.


  • nature
    August 14

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    Your magic in words...

    ....awaken the desire ...
    "..like butterflies
    softly touching, wooing .."

    ..and make you hers forever as you say..

    "I am undeniably yours."

    Congratulations, for love truly has no limits.




  • trekkergirl
    August 13

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    Oh wow

    You really know how to make it hot in a room.... Shhh! What a write. Need to move to a cooler climate.

    Wonderful. Imagery is great! Wonderful.

    I love the way you have written this.

    Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.


  • doolie gold member
    August 9

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    Soft, sweet and full of heartfelt emotions. Another beautiful write, sis.
    Nice job...Best of luck in the contest.

    I love your new picture sis.


  • DeJaBlue
    August 6

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    Powerful emotion you have captured here, my friend.
    I love the way you write with gentle imagery that pulls
    you into the heart of the piece.
    Nice...very nice.


  • Camille Morin gold member
    August 6
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    This evokes such powerful memory of this feeling. You have written this beautifully, Rend. Bravo.
    Love,
    Camille


  • poppa
    August 2

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    I could only echo MJ's comments... such a soft weaving of words, makes one wish they had exactly that..
    good luck


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 2
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      Rob,

      thank for all your support and clappies
      your friendship is always appreciated

      Blessings always

      Rend


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    August 2

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    It's when I read words like this, that I understand why people can be in love, with being in love.


    Gave me pleasant chill Rend.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 2
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      Thank you Michael
      Loving someone, is a natural element to nurturing ones soul
      and it takes lots of comunication. without that...love becomes
      just a word.

      Blessings always

      Rend

  • dukiesmomma
    August 1
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    awesome


  • PerVirtuous
    July 31
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    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 2

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      yeah a smile, and some clappies I will return the favor

      many blessings,

      Rend

      • PerVirtuous
        August 2
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        I am not qualified to critique your poetry. I just smile and send bunnies.


  • awannabepoet
    July 31

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    That which dwells in the heart of your heart and that which does dwell in the body and mind of your being one could not and should never question.

    We are beings that do seek the company of those we would hold dear even when one would scream at the top of thier lungs that they do so declare love is within them.

    I like it, I like it so!


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 2
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      yes who wouldnt want love to dwell in them, aside from God, but to have
      words spoken were our heart nutured back to life that mean much more than anything, I just love your comments always so thought provolking

      Blessings to always

      Rend


  • Xianaria gold member
    July 30

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    A beautiful surrender of the heart, very moving
    Best wishes in the contest, and blessings to you and this lucky guy!

    ~ Tim


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 2
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      I do have to appologize for being so behind on all your writes and poems
      please pardon me Sir and now i want to say thank you for coming by and commenting,

      Blessings always

      Rend


  • thepoetssoul
    July 30

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    Such a soft and romantic piece of poetry.
    Beautifully written, smile always.

    Tony


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 2
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      Tony,
      coming from you , i just receieve a bounty of flowers
      thank you dear friend for your clappies too

      Blessings

      Rend

  • silverfish
    July 30

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    this poem reads beautifully, the way it whispers of sweet surrender and enfolds the reader's heart without using emotional manipulation. -silverfish


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 2
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      Silverfish,

      thank you for seeing that part, i didnt realize it until you
      wrote it, its always a pleasure to have you come by and read,
      the honor i have is to come by and comment on your writes
      and poem because they are so well written with so much Talent
      thank you again for your comment and clappies

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Daizee silver member
    July 30

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    I think the word 'yours', when used in reference to being someone's love, is one of the most romantic words in the world. I knew before I read this that I would be swept up into your words. Your reference to the climb above the mountains is such a true feeling when you are experiencing that kind of blissful love. As if you are truly on top of the world. You have such a romantic, tender way to the way you write, Rend. I love stopping by your words


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 2
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      i love writing about love, and all those romantic notions
      some times they are from experiences and sometimes they are
      just pure longing in my heart. thank you so much for stoping
      and giving me some clappies my sweet friend its always a pleasure
      will return the favor,

      Blessings & love

      Rend


  • Glasyalabolas
    July 30

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    Exceptionally warm and lovingly open, not hiding the depth of feeling that comes shining through. Excellent wording and it is not long, though with words like these nailing it down exactly, it doesn't need to be.

    Good write.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 2
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      thank you for your indepth comment, i am so behind on your writes,
      i am thankful that we are friends, and that you have given me grace
      and for your clappies,

      Blessings to you always

      Rend


  • Cup-a-Joe
    July 30
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    Sigh~~
    Love this. Beautiful imagery.
    Sigh~~


    Joe


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 31
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      Oh my sweet Friend,
      I so love your visits, please can you bring your coffee
      next time i am running low, and your comments are
      the cream that laces my coffee, ~ sweet~

      Many blessings

      Rend

  • Bob Fox
    July 30

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    Rend

    seekers of love and seekers of the flesh. Perhaps a constant contradiction. But when one seeks to love the heart and soul tis just a wonderful, truly magical combination...Do you not think?


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 31
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      Hello Bob,

      Thank you for stopping by and commenting
      I love writing Love Poerty, its so calming to
      me, yes being in the momemt is magical,
      I cant think of a better place to be

      Blessings to you Bob

      Rend


  • alivefromlove
    July 30
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    this poem is so soft and beautiful my friend... excellent write!!! =)


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 31
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      its been too long since i have heard from you
      my Brother, and it was a sweet fragrance as well
      many blessings

      Rend


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    July 30

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    Beauty of sensual suduction first came to mind with this romantic loving and softly written piece of poetry.
    I reathed essence of...
    Good luck in this contest hun

    Julie xxx xx


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 30
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      Julie,
      thank you so much for stopping I didnt forget about you
      i still need to make up about 3, they are all so dang good!!

      Blessings and Love

      Rend

  • ElectricBloom
    July 30

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    this is such a beautiful write.
    so full of love and tenderness, you hold such gorgeous imagery and description throughout. i especially love the ending lines, they're such a perfect ending! they have this head-over-heels element to them
    well done, simply beautiful, i really enjoyed reading this.

    ElectricBloom


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 30
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      thank you for stopping by and commenting that means alot to me,
      your support and encouragement is what make me strive to do better
      Blessings

      Rend


  • Garmond gold member
    July 29

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    Speaks a soft but pure-hearted declaration of love and devotion. The imagery and feel of this is very dream-like Rend. Do you know.... I always feel a sense of... I think 'shyness' is the right word... when I read you. Perhaps the word 'timid' would even fit.... don't know, but this one is certainly soaked in it. I of course have no idea if that is an element of you the author just shining through.... or if it is something that is intentionally applied to your writing and expression... but it seems to be a signature of fragility that underscores your work.
    Always a pleasure to read you.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 29
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      Andrew,

      You say words that i cant express seeing a deeper part of me,
      i think is hidden, thank you so much for your indept comment
      and clappies,

      Blessings always

      Rend


  • Cannonsfire
    July 29

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    sighs...you made me go all mushy inside here, beautiful words my dear friend C


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 30
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      thank you Chez,
      your comments are a treasure, i will miss your encouragement
      and support.

      Blessings and Love

      Rend


  • Rose Angel gold member
    July 29

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    Romantically alluring us with those charming words.....You have done it again..All the best in the contest! Mom


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 29
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      Mom,

      thank you great prompt i say you are so encouraging to me,
      and always a blessings love you & miss you too!

      Blessings

      Rend


  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 29

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    Wow, sounds like some very lucky guy, interesting what lips are capable of doing plus its even more interesting what tea tree oil and fingers can do- but then that is a massaging sorta feeling huh? Nice, sensual write there gal- very



    Len


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 29
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      you are funny Len,
      Tea Tree Oil you know there are over 100
      things to do with that oil? and only one concerns
      me. smooth tooties

      Blessings

      Rend

  • SarahBaller15
    July 29

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    Ohmygoodness! I could picture everything you wrote in my head! You are one talented writer that's fersure (: . Keep writing I can't wait to read more of your poetry.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 29
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      you are sweet and i so apreciate your comment
      thank you again for coming by to read and applauses

      Blessings always

      Rend

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