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broken bird

I'm like a bird
in more ways than one

I soar up and away
towards the glittering sun

my wings, they catch fire
I start to  decline

back into the depression
contained in the mind.

Author notes

haven't written in years and this is a ver short random piece that i just wanted to write, i might remove it. maybe re work itm at some point.

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  • IrishWyne
    July 29
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    I think it was really good. Wished the "I's" where capitalized though. I love the whole bird idea. Nice work!