Emerald wine fuels their craving for sin,
blood smeared seductively over alabaster skin,
soft music playing for couples swinging in pairs,
as tortured victims chained in corners whisper their prayers.
Blue violet eyes shine beneath black feathered masks,
as the waiters go about handing out flasks,
take a sip of absinthe spiked with a dose of white powder
then join us in the dining hall for some fresh human chowder.
Moans and screams of those indulging upstairs,
where women once virtuous abandon their cares,
and their husbands either participate or are bound to the floor,
where they watch their wives get fucked and then beg for more.
Dance to the sound of a stranded infant's cries,
or watch the executioner gouge out their eyes,
innocents tied down are cut open and beat,
and once they've deceased they are chopped up for meat.
Music to my ears is the moans and the groans
of those being hit by sticks that cruelly break their bones,
and the oozing sound of eyes popping under raw fire,
this growing mound of corpses adds to my desire.
So join me in this dance for the crazed and the dark
where our music is death and the black jackal's bark,
where we give up our lives and indulge in the flesh
a place where our world and the dark pits of Hell mesh.
Author notes
M i s s M a c a b r e
- Night Terrors group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Give me what you believe to be good by DarkHunter.
435 points, ended August 10, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Scare My Pants Off! by XxLoverOfDarknessxX.
1225 points, ended August 29, 47 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best PreWrite. by Kastor.
470 points, ended October 11, 77 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Horror, Blood and Macabre by Hikari Lady.
1200 points, ended October 17, 22 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - brutality by scribbleheart.
800 points, ended November 23, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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a very brutal, dark write...but I enjoyed reading it, it is full of great imagery and it is really flowing...very well penned, reading this got me goos bumps all over my body...deserved trophy collection...
take care
Suza
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Absolutely the kind of thing I'm waiting for. Amazing. Your rhyming scheme is great too
I love the second line, and how through out the poem you talk about the sex appeal in violence. Exactly what I want.
This is a really enjoyable read, well done.
Thanks for entering, good luck!
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Sorry, had to re-enter it. Some sort of site hiccup.
It's there now though.
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I love it although it is a bit disturbing lol.
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OMG!! This was sickening! The imagery was fantastic and so disgusting if one can say without offending.
It was written with excellent rhyme and in sickening imagery. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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I'd recognize your poetry anywhere I think. The anonymity of your entry in my contest is spoiled by your uniquely identifiable style. Nobody can be you. I only had to get through the first line to suspect, the first verse to smirk, and a quick look at the comments to know; Miss Macabre is eating people again. Your fingerprints are unmistakably gross and beautiful, but keep your hands off my liver girly.
p.s.
Cheater!
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Lol, damn you!
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This was crazy, in a good way. It was so descriptive that I was able to perfectly picture everything, from the dining hall, to the executioner, to everything else. Great work, and excellent flow and end-rhyme.
My favorite line is "Blue violet eyes shine beneath black feathered masks," I don't know why, but I like it, along with the rest of the poem.
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Thank you. ^.^ This is my best poem I think.
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You don't hold back one damn inch do you. Powerful pen with shock intentions.
The sentences and phrases are poetic and your skill shows through your meter and unforced rhyme. You use whatever you need , however dark, to weave an artistic view . It works.
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Instead of a shock band, I'm a shock poet, lol. Thank you very much, I'm very proud of this one. ^.^
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I take back what I said about rhyming not producing emotion.......
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Hehe, glad you enjoyed. ^.^
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very macabre indeed,that was an amazing write,i live in the darkness and i felt at home here,so vivid,i am definitely looking forward to more
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This is absolutely scarry and terrifying! Wonderful imagery, really gets me to feel the chills! Great work on this!!! Thank you soo much for your entry
Evershine
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Wow your poem scares me so bad. It really does. Your poem reminds me of a friend of mine. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for your entry.
-Jess
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holy............. wow, this is by far one of the darkest writes i have read in quite some time. EXCELLENT imagery, Honestly a lil too dirty for my tastes, but dark it is. and thats what im looking for here in my contest, great job and thank you for entering!
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Lol, it is dirty isn't it? Glad you enjoyed.
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Oh boy, this is the darkness we all have in our animalism buried beneath the thin veneer of our social mask of respectability. I hate violence but, like many others, find a dark fascination in it too - a bit like staring at a road accident with morbid curiosity. Super rhyme and excellent imagery make this a very good write in this genre. I sense too the humor in this poem despite its explosively dark themes lol. Tony
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I'm glad you enjoyed.
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soo this comment isn't insulting but it isn't constructive criticism either so I hope you welcome it. For one, I don't find this disgusting to the point that it gets in the way of the great poetry that is here; infact, I really like the way you describe the screams and the torture here. "then join us in the dining hall for some fresh human chowder." is a great line.
I also like the stanza right after that. It's cool how you begin and end with stanzas about music and dancing. It makes this piece not just about torture but also about how some humans actually have the ability to WANT to torture others like this and enjoy it, too.
I do have 2 questions though. Do you ever run out of words that rhyme, and do you always rhyme in your dark poems? I feel like there are so only so many ways to say "flesh" and "torture".
Anyway, great work! I really enjoyed reading this!
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Sometimes I run out of words that rhyme, sometimes I just reuse words I favor. And I don't usually rhyme, actually most of my stuff is free verse, but that's new with me I guess. Thanks for reading.
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i throe down a gauntlet. write a light poem about love and flowers
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Hm. Like this: http://allpoetry.com/poem/5418609
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i wonder, and this is just a question not a crtique
do you ever think of writing some poery that is light in nature? ark stuff is great but we can't allow ourselves only one option in life
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I have, yes. It doesn't always have the same passion, but I do like to write about October and Fall. Dark is my specialty, I do try other things every once and awhile. Thanks for reading.
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WOW! It was breath-taking and flawless....
astounding rhyme...and damn...you scared the shit out of all of us!
(I'm suppose to go to an innocent neighbhorhood bbq tonight)
maybe I should think twice?
Loved it...OMG!
the textures, depths and rawness
of your attack...was perfection in dark writing!
well done!
ears/Seattle
I do not condone any form of violence, however....YOUR POEM
DEVOURS, SHATTERS, SLAUGHTERS... all those sweet swinging myths...whole!
wow!
WAY TO WRITE!
You should truly pat yourself and howl to the moon with this write!
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Yay! I'm glad for such enthusiasm, I wasn't sure if anyone would enjoy it when I decided to feature it. I have to say my other poems pale compared to this one, but I hold it in high regard with the hopes something just as good will come along. Thanks for reading.
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Yay!!! I love it. Some may say sick and twisted, but I say friggin awesome! I love it, it's just so morbid and creepifying. I just wanted to read more. The second stanza is the best. This is so "house of sed and torture." Great job.
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I'm glad you enjoyed!
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the word s i would choose is Ace i shit you not. very bold write for someone as young as you. very dark. Like it
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed.
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BLIME
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The fourth stanza really sticks out for me; this whole poem is bloody fantastic, dark, strong, gripping and oh so original Excelllent.
Unfortunately as per the first rule of my contest:
"It has to be a poem that is NOT entered in another contest! I have always found it rude. If it is entered in one that is OVER & JUDGED then it is welcome here; but if the contest isn’t over & judged don’t bother entering it here."
I am going to have to DQ this as this is entered in other contest that aren’t over and my contest isn't judged.
Best of Luck in other Contests
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Sorry, must have forgotten I had entered it into yours and went spreading it about foolishly.
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WOW. this was amazing! I loved it! such amazing imagery. This sent chills down my spine as I read this. Great emotions, as well as phenomenal rhyming throughout this entire piece. BRAVO! WELL DONE! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Glad you enjoyed!
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wow
tis dark and wonderful
great rhyme throught out...
from start to finish
this was awsome
well done on this write.......tis nasty
Jayde
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Thanks.
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Great stuff!!!
Deep, dark & beautifully penned...
Strong narrative with graphic imagery, flawless rhyme & flows wonderfully...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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Great!
I like it too... the images are extremely cruel... and dark... You handle the rhyme well, particularly like rhyming pairs and prayers...
Maybe, if you're into it, get rid of a few of your transitional words... make it a little tighter, more economic and that might give it a harder rhythm make it more active, in the moment.
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Thank you!
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This is madness and you fucking know what? I freaking love it...
Marquis de Sade, move the fuck over dude!
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Hehe, the master Marquis. Glad you enjoyed.
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Wow I fucking loved this dark writes are always awesome and this had a great flow to it also great rhyming Amazing write
Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck
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I loved this! Great imagery of dark madness coupled with a Monster's Ball dripping with lace and gore.
The only thing I think "my opinion" might sound better is to replace the word fu**ked with "raped" it sounds more demeaning to me....LOL...
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Hm, good suggestion. Only problem is people don't usually ask for more rape.
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lmao I love yourself too. This is a great poem, I love poems that sound like something I'd write. Something completely dark and really fucked up. :-X ha ha ha. Macabre writing is the stuff that nightmares and dreams are made of.
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Hehe, agreed. Glad you enjoyed.
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This is pretty much maximum fantistical, as is... You sick fuck!
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Thank you! I'm glad somebody finally commented on this. I'm pretty much super proud of it. And I will admit, I am one fucked up individual.
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