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Do I Think to Feel or, Feel to Think ?

I think I think I'm really me,
I'm me, who looks through God each day
when venturing to fight life's fray -
I'm free I think to think I'm free.

Life’s little fish in fee pond see
me swim till In_turn Net casts phish
upon identity to dish
life's causal quest : eternity.

Trace race reels on haphazardly
till passed up, by time's bank foreclosed,
to ‘Standard Poor’ metamorphosed
as mind grinds heartfelt hopes at sea.

Though verse divine is made by me, -
what's cause/effect, and where is She ?

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29 July 2009 robi3_1891_robi3_0000 SWX_JEZ

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  • Raoul Duke
    August 17

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    Intresting take on the prompt. I particularly liked 'I'm free I think to think I'm free.' Says a lot about the nature of thinking and its importance.
    Good luck in the contest.


  • kylierenea
    August 16

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    Wow, amazing! I really like the subject of this poem especially. I also like the way you did the rhyme scheme; adding in rhyming words within the lines. This is a very creative write, keep it up Thanks for your entry!


  • PatheticKt
    August 15

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    Huh, this reminds of David Hume in his Theory of Passion and Will or Rene Descartes or Dr. Seuss
    Anyway, lovely rhymes here that can give a wild ride for the reader to feel while reading the lovely penned lines.
    Although, I think there is a double meaning in the theme, it seems abstract but I honestly find it too thought-provoking that it can leave the reader wanting to know more(not saying that as a bad thing, it's insightful); the first stanza does seem the easiest to read, though
    All in all, this is still a great write, glad to read it


  • kerrypn
    August 14

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    Very clever, and a good take on the prompt. Your talent has no bounds-sonnets as well now!Consider me a groupie! You have a very distinct style that really lends itself to some amazing story telling, I love this-your twisting of words and sentence structure, almost a "tongue twister" -just exquisite! Well done on another fabulous write and best of luck in the contest!

  • jake x x x
    August 13

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    absalutly amazing! it answers the question so well!


  • adios muchachos gold member
    August 1

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    Do you think they will print this in the Wall Street Journal?
    Either way it would be a compliment!

    John

  • goldfishboy
    July 29

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    nice work

    I really liked some of the buisiness references in this poem because of their creativity (eg. phishing rather than fishing). I hope to read more poems like this one in the future.


  • naturaldefeatest
    July 29

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    My wee little pee brain is confused.
    I must come back and reread many many times until I've perfected understanding.


  • Night Hope gold member
    July 29

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    Unfortunately, there are more poor standards than there are in the Standard Poor, methinks. Good one, Scribe.



  • waydownuponjoy
    July 29

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    Perfect ...

    answer to the question and done with style! Your poetry has a nice cadence and filled with places to stop and think about the dynamics that you shared with care as always. I wish you the best is this contest as it appears to me that it should be eligible to win a gold for the thought that you extended to it. joy

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