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Only six

She looks at me with haunted eyes.
She's stuck here for eternity
in that moment where
I left her behind.

Her cheeks are sunken,
hair tangled, bangs in face.
Her clothes torn from
his menacing hands,
tears drip and dry on her face.

I didnt mean to leave her here,
I only meant to get away
But when for santiy I forgot,
she was trapped forever with my repression.

If I faced those horrid moments,
I think I'd go insane.
So, I leave this inner child
to battle the pain I boxed her up with.

She looks at me with haunted eyes
"Come back for me" she whispers
But I can't.
I can't.
She's only six!

So sorry...

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I was cleaning my room and found this in my closet. I wrote it when i was a teenager

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  • Yemassee gold member
    August 17

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    Did you write ythis as a teen? It's quite perceptive and introspective. And rven the teenage you seemed to understand that there is sometimes a need to get away from it all. Sadly she also seemed to understand that you can't really get away, that a part of you always remains behind with the trouble...and usually that most vulnerable part. So...keep digging in the closet, maybe there are other gems there! Find any money I have dibs on it though!


  • Navajo Apsara gold member
    August 12

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    WIf I faced those horrid moments,I think I'd go insane.So, I leave this inner child
    to battle the pain I boxed her up with.OW WOW WOW this is so sad full of emotion and feelings. That is sad the child within never had a chance to grow up then everything is put off on her. This is excellent. Thank you for sharing.


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    August 11
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    Wow, so sad. Dripping with emotion

    Thanks for sharing, keep writing!

    x


  • Cynthia
    August 8

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    Excellent

    Oh my goodness.
    This is so sad.
    I truly enjoy reading your writes Sarah.
    You have quite the gift my friend.
    Well done.
    Keep up with the great work.
    Keep on penning.
    Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.

    *S* Cynthia

  • dissonancesquared
    August 8

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    this poem tells a horrifying story. i hope things have improved for you.

    the style fits the content very well, but some lines are awkwardly long, such as "to battle the pain i boxed her up with"

    that detracted a bit but i was definately sucked in by your writing and your story.


  • Mark Harrap
    August 4
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    wow,wow,wow

    brilliantly written.....heart wrenching content.......we survive as best we can


  • pondainwonda silver member
    August 2
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    To read someone whom has so much to express wow


  • wattle silver member
    July 31

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    Oh wow Ms Sarah. Teenagers are a worry but they do sign post the direction of who they will become. The poets stand out and bubble to the surface. ---- Magically poem. Thank you. (Write her a letter/poem 'now'; I'd love to read it; would be like a journey plan and a destination description.)


  • CharliesAngel
    July 30
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    Teenage years sucked but they led to some great poetry huh!


  • RT KatPat
    July 30
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    a nice read
    Well done.

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