by ~Gregg Rowe~
curves,
drift lines of the tongue
spent cream
licked out
as it seeps
between curves
come of age
our Aphrodite bodies
slide together
like spoons
hips enjoined
kiss and touch
of one shoulder
as the dagger
prepares to cut
into your curve
I wade inside
feel the soft spot
and release
my liquid flesh
your silk fawned nipple
softens
we draw breaths
like Jack Frost on a window
I sashay your soul
roll my pink tongue
upon yours
and I lick your curves
free you of my spent cream
gathering my liquid flesh
Author notes
EROTICA (do i really have to explain)
Written December 1st, 2001
In a list
A contest entry
- Show Me What You've Got by Jeezus niece.
300 points, ended March 29, 2006, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Tyrst: Never underestimate your first instincts in reading, you were correct: it is indirectly and subtedly about lesbian sex. Without being graphic, I do know of some women who have these fantastic orgasms (or I just watch too many porno films
Gregg 
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i thought at first, with the Aphrodite reference, it was about lesbian love, then the dagger image and the liquid flesh (an amazing metaphor, by the way) shifted my perspective....which was an unexpected, but interesting shift...it sort of made the poem androgynous.
smooth lines....well done.
~tryst -
steaming piece! very soultry and sensual and erotic! a powerful blend! did i also say seductive?! this piece has it all the form,the imagery,the metaphores and just the captivation that it holds is great! your talent is shinning through on this piece great poem once again an thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
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Well- the dagger cutting in to the curve, and releasing liquid flesh into the soft spot are very male sentiments, I have to say. Possibly you don't see this from your perspective, which I do respect. I like the imagery, and as I mentioned it is original...Maybe some rewording, if you want it to be ambivalent- from a woman's perspective. Love between women usually is not about depositing fluids...LOL...or taking them from the other. More about closeness, liquids aside. Don't take offense, just offering another perspective.
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Steel Penny: As the author of this poem I would have to disagree with you and say that the speaker or interpretation of the speaker in the poem has an ambivalence about it and that it could be very well be construed as either hetero or lesbian if the reader would only decipher some of its secondary meanings to the diction applied. This could very well be two women making love which was the original thought I was penning through the speaker as I was remembering history lessons in Greek societies. It's unfortunate that you have limited the scope of the poem just to be hetero...that was not my intention at all.
Gregg
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Sorry, it was girl/girl only- this one is hetero..I had to read it again to realize that. I do like it though, creative imagery and original thoughts.
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Sexy- like it! Good luck in the contest!
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Oh wonderful! I can't believe I read this all before work! Whatever shall I do?!?
Your words so enticing and so captivating! You got me squirming here.
I also love the background you have chosen as well. Stunning!
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This is a really sexy poem, deep and erotic in its own way. you have a beautiful talent to convey so much emotion in just words its a art work that not many people can do. Yuo gave me the shivers and i had to take a big breath before starting writting. really loved it lots. Thank you for being who you are and presenting to me a bit of ur soul.
Lots of hugs and kisses GND -
Very hot indeed.
Reminds me what it reminds everyone else of.
THe Hotness!
Seriously though, this is excellent imagery.
Your descriptions are so deep, literally and figurativly. The pic is hot too but that has nothing to do with the poem.
Even without the pic, your words are honey to my tongue.
Much Respect,
KTG
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I absolutely love this. It's beautifully written and very sensual. Amazing write. Thank you so much for entering my contest. Best of luck. Keep up the great work.
~Miranda
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wonderfull and sexy
This is beautiful...i love the picture..its perfect...but the poem blew me away...like i have said many a time you are a great writer adn the best erotica writer i have ever met..or at least red works of...great job....and keep it up...
heather -
I swear, each time I read your poems my breath is taken away. You have such an amazing way of writing, it shows through in every one of your poems. The imagery is always so vivid and beautiful. Absolutely wonderful.
~Rose~ -
great use of imagery and metaphors .. it paints a great picture.. the wording is awesome and very intelligently written.. great write and good luck in the contest
Yours FlavrdPoison -
Very sensual...the words flow like wine, dancing upon the page with your exquisite background ~ love the Jack Frost line...I'm surrounded by beautiful, graceful curves...absolutely beautiful.
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wow...i'm speechless...very powerful language....I love the background...it really fits in well...great poem...keep writing....Luv Caz
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usually the erotic poems i actually dare to read are mocking of the experience, but you....i just really like the way you've handled and expressed such an intimate moment. i particularly like the second to last stanza when you didnt just tell your reader your breathe caused the windows to fog....you used the reference to Jack Frost...winter....to illustrate this detail. well done and good luck.
Take Care -
Sensuous
Ooh sexy!
I liked the background, too.
It added a certain ... eroticism to it.
Not that it needed it.
This was definitely passionate, which is great.
The words were all it took to describe everything but the background added flavor.
The curved, tongues, rolls ... beautifully put.
Great job and make sure to comment on at least two other poems in the contest.
And speaking of, good luck in it!
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Um.. I'm gonna need a minute...
::Exits the room.. followed by the sound of heavy breathing and hushed moans.::
20 MINUTES LATER
Ok, back.. that was a great poem.. I really got a lot out of it.. LMAO.
Blessed Be
Lilli
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It's mighty HOT in here ;)
Deliciously enchanting and erotic. I love the sensual feel of it, the purity and grace with which it is written, only adds to the heightening of arousal. The style I actually prefer to read myself, but of course I'm human and tend to have my devilish, animalistic moments as well. I think perhaps I could use a cold shower right about now or wake up a hot man
Excellent write, makes me purrrrr 
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Excellent erotica. That is damn hot. Great work!
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Great job on writing this. You used such an amazing choice of words. This was an awesome write!
Good Luck
*&*
Thanks for entering
~Chibbs~ -
pretty good for a gay guy, lol...but yeah refreshing vocabulary, great flew and easy to tap into imagery, i loved!
great, as all your work is
love, of course,
caity
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Pretty good. Interesting usage of words and imagery. I think this was well written. Good job and dont give up writting.
-J. -
oops two-timing with Unbridled and I missed a lick lol
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hahaha...milk as an aphrodisiac huh...well now there is a new one...but always worth a try
haha
UB
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Orgasmic write
curves,
drift lines of the tongue
spent cream
licked out
as it seeps
between curves
Great poem!! Awesome imagery! Orgasmic....... *licks you and runs* -
Me too, I have to go for a cold shower after that one...I don't know what it is -- in a weird mood this morning...been pounding (excuse the pun) limericks out all day lol...maybe too many pints of milk...intoxicating on calcium
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Yikes!!! Gregg, you recognize that for me...in my practically always aroused state...lol...this is cause for a cold shower??? All those curves...licks...what's a single girl to do now?!! "liquid flesh"...really liking that image. You are totally naughty!! love it!
UB
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Thanks Unbridled for the backdrop to this poem!!!!!
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