The ground crumbles beneath my feet,
while the stars in your eyes explode;
blazing white, colour fading fast.
I'm sorry it had to end this way,
but you know me, my dear,
I love to lose my mind.
Author notes
Inspired by the song The Last Day On Earth by Kate Miller-Heidke.
A contest entry
- A Poem That I Can Get Into!!! Give Me Your Best! by MJ Forgives.
1000 points, ended August 13, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I'm sorry it had to end this way,
but you know me, my dear,
I love to lose my mind.
Love that as it means so much using so few words
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Thank you
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Thank you for the applause
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BRAVO!!!!
LOVED this one sweetie!!!!
"but you know me, my dear,
I love to lose my mind."
I enjoy insanity lol...brilliantly penned!!
xoxoxoxoxox
~Mother~
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Thank you Mother
lol, yep I enjoy insanity too
xoxo
Kate
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Beautiful
This is so simple and too the point, yet complex in the images your writing creates. I absolutely love this. The first stanza has its own type of imagery while the last stanza is more direct and to the point. They work perfectly together!!!
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Thank you
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This is a fresh sort of write and one that leaves the owrds open to a little interpretation. I loved it heaps and thanks for sharing with us.
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Thank you. I'm always hapy to share my poetry with others who take the time to read it.
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Wow it was short but I loved it!!!! I really did. I loved all of it! I hope you do stupendous in my contest and thankx for entering.
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=D this is awesome lol i hope you can't see me writing this as im on the bus next to you =P love tam xo
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Thankies lol and no I didn't see you writing this while on the bus
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