I look in the mirror and see a girl,
who is staring back at me,
I don't know who she is,
because she's not the girl I wanna be.
She puts on a smile,
while inside she is falling apart,
she says "I'm okay",
as pain fills her heart.
She pretends not to care,
as everyone slowly walks away,
she hides behind her mask,
and pretends to be okay.
She is scared to open up,
and call someone her best friend,
they all turn out the same,
and never really care in the end.
She is scared to let people close,
it always ends up as heartache,
she decides to trust someone,
but it always ends up a big mistake.
She feels like a stranger in her own home,
like she doesent even belong,
she tries the best she can,
but it always seems to be wrong.
She freezes up at the word "love",
people throw it around to much,
her muscles constirct,
as she's afraid to be thouched.
She has ideas about the future,
hopes and dreams of her own,
but she doesent hold her breath,
because dissappment is all she's ever known.
She asks "why an I never good enough",
"why am I always second choise",
people tell her she needs to stand up for what she wants,
she's got to find her own voise.
I know who I wanna be,
it's all so much clearer,
but the fact of life is,
I'm only the girl in the mirror.
A contest entry
- A Poem That I Can Get Into!!! Give Me Your Best! by MJ Forgives.
1000 points, ended August 13, 78 entries
Honorable mention
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Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Amazing write that unfortunately suffers a little from bad spelling, still the emotions come through despite your typo mistakes. For one so young you write beautifully otherwise, and a poem I'm sure many your age and older will relate to. Take care and I must congratulate you on your gold trophy win here.
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lol this poem won me my first gold trovy!!!!! yay! thank you guys!
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wow...
this has left me speachless. its so good. it relates to alot of people, including me. i did notice some spelling mistakes. well one. "thouched" i think is supposed to be touched, but i dont think i matters all too much. i can really relate to how your the outsider of your family. and i agree that the word 'love' is over used. all in all, amazing write!!!! oh and congrats in the contest!
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wow this truly relates.I LOVE IT
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thank you for entering
Just WOW!
its so relatable to me and so many other poeple, its just fantastic, i honestly dont know what to say....
Good luck and thanks for entering!
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its totally amazing...but really sad i read many poetry on the ap but this is the only 1 who forced me to erase tears streaming down my cheecks....keep it up..good luck
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This is a deeply moving poem, especially from someone of such a tender age; love is a word thrown about too much I agree but among families it should be an open and honest feeling
I am sorry you endure these thoughts and fears
You have a couple small spelling errors -
'thouched.' - 'touched'
"why an I never ..." - why am I never ...
'voise' - 'voice'
easy mistakes to make mate
Unfortunately as per the first rule of my contest:
"It has to be a poem that is NOT entered in another contest! I have always found it rude. If it is entered in one that is OVER & JUDGED then it is welcome here; but if the contest isn’t over & judged don’t bother entering it here."
I am going to have to DQ this as this is entered in other contest/s that aren’t over and my contest isn't judged.
Best of Luck in other Contests
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Would you mind IMing me so that I can look at some of your other poems, I would love to read some more of your poems
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I am absolutely speechless, it's like your... me. I am exactly like this poem in so many ways, as I was reading through I found myself picking out stanza's that I could comment on but when I looked at the end of the poem, it was all of them.
"She is scared to open up,
and call someone her best friend,
they all turn out the same,
and never really care in the end.
She is scared to let people close,
it always ends up as heartache,
she decides to trust someone,
but it always ends up a big mistake." These two stanza's explained me the most, every time I call some one a best friend they throw it in my face and do something to hurt me. So I don't like to let people close any more, and even when I do trust they turn out to be just the same as everyone else. The stanza about the feeling like a stranger in her own home, I am also like that, I feel like I stand on the outside looking in, whenever I try to have a conversation with someone they just walk off and act like I am not there, and I also have dreams to, I would like to be a chef and own my own resturant in the future, and although I am going to try very hard to get this I always get the feeling something is going to stop this from happening. I'm sorry about this long post, and I bet you get a lot of people telling you how they are like your poem so I will wrap this comment up now.
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I liked this. this was written very well with good emotions in it. amazing imagery; don't worry hun everything will be okay. keep up the good work! good luck in the contest!
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ok, this is weird. I have a poem virtually exactly like this, about the same thing everything. Keep on in there girl things do work out i the end.
There are a few spelling mistakes that you need to correct, and maybe look at a few words and how you can re-arrange them but other than that great write. i enjoyed reading it it was packed full of emotion, i loved it
thanks for entering and good luck
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I love your poem it reminded me of me. I can really relate to it. I use to be like that when I was younger. I especially can relate to this part and stil feel like that sometimes: "She asks "why an I never good enough",
"why am I always second choise",
people tell her she needs to stand up for what she wants,
she's got to find her own voise.". I hope you do wonderful in my contest and thanks for your entry.
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omg i loved this!! you are a great writer, ive read your work. keep it up!
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AMAZEING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
wow ok this is like the best poem I have ever read! I so loved it! man I so feel like this to wow amazeing! keep up the great work!
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Amazing
Wow i love this.. i feel just like that.
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