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Just Friendship

I still feel the ache you left in me.
When we speak I hope you won’t see.
Hearing from you it gets me through
My mind overflows with thoughts of you.
You speak the words that puzzle all
Someday’s they even make me fall.
If distance wasn’t an issue for us
Our love wouldn’t be a fuss.
I blew away the trust you once had
I know I messed up and which makes me sad.
Friendship is all you can give me now
There is no reason as to how.

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  • lost-and-found1413
    July 28
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    Oh yeah I forgot the why. And I chose that background on purpose.

  • Frodofan
    July 28

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    Not sure what you mean by the wording in the last line. Reason as to how friendship is all he can give? Wouldn't that be why?

    Also: "I know I messed up and which makes me sad. "
    It's also pretty hard to read on this background. Reversing the edge background with the main would be good.

    I think it's full of emotion and poetic, just needs some refining. You might try putting it to a meter so that all the lines flow smoothly together.