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~~My Touch~~

Missing image
My touch
like a feather
that rides upon the wind
caresses your face

The wind
on your face
whispers my adoration
not a promise
simply life

A breath
needed to exist
like our
touch

My touch
is one with you
a burning desire
forever
my amour

Author notes

My attempt at free verse
I did not use any of the following words:love
angel
faithful
devotion
kiss
heart
fire
bliss
passion
secret
baby
promise
enchanting

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  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    August 5

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    I loved the simplicity of this, and the gentleness. It was subtle, sensual, and delicately expressed. I do love your freeverse pieces, though they are rare!


  • doolie gold member
    August 4
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    This is beautiful, Sis. Such a warm and heartfelt write. Great job...Best wishes in the contest.


  • Hetha gold member
    August 1

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    Expressive, it feels like a whisper when I read it. I find it lovely.


  • Wesley Storer
    July 31
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    Excellent Free Verse

    You look familiar somehow. Have you been in any movies or on t.v.?


  • Ethereal One gold member
    July 30

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    excellent!

    A very tender poem you have penned here.
    What a good job you have done expressing the love between 2 people without using the listed words so commonly used in a love poem.

    Good luck in this contest Sis!

    Jeannette


  • Desire gold member
    July 29

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    Wow~

    Oh My Word what images come to Mind after reading this
    Excellent use of the Word Bank Sis
    Bravo!
    Woot~

    The picture grabs but so do Your words
    Yay!

    Lovin this!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest Beautiful
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Purush
    July 29

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    My touch
    is one with you
    a burning desire
    forever
    my amour

    romantically worded verse
    short sweet and smart
    kudo

  • goalsv
    July 29

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    Very sensual and romantic. Good free verse. A very good take on the picture, you gave it life and meaning. Wonderful write.


  • maralisa silver member
    July 29
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    aw a wonderful romantic write sis good luck inthe contestsis


  • Bosiarbooger gold member
    July 28

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    Bravo

    Wonderful job here, and I have a hard time with free verse so it seems even sweeter. The feeling is light and the mood set is one of simple pleasures. Nothing hard or rushed but a caring loving piece. Well done young lady, and best of luck in the contest and in life. Keep up the great work, Rick


  • penman gold member
    July 28
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    Excellent

    Such a terrific write. And so well expressed. Many blessings in the contest.


  • crivanea silver member
    July 28

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    awww! that's so adorable! I saw this contest but I'm afraid my "romantic" side is hiding right now..lol..anyways..wonderfully said! and congrat on not using the list of words piccola provided..best wishes in the contest


  • daviscth silver member
    July 28

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    I think you did a really good job with this poem sis. It's much better than anything I could have written and you are brave to try free verse. Good luck...

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