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Twins

Two souls born,
destined to be torn.
Apart from each other,
separate from one another.

Together they were strong,
living where they belong.
But fate turned them down,
and let their hearts breakdown.

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  • saz 09
    August 5

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    ok, i am never usually that keen on short poems, but i really enjoyed it. I liked the way you packed what you wanted to say in just two stanzas. well done, the rhyming was good and it flowed well. Thanks for entering

    good luck


  • GinryuStargazer
    July 31

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    ANYWAY...

    I really liked the story in the poem :3 I don't have a twin, but I'm Gemini, so YEAH!!


  • GinryuStargazer
    July 31
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    OMG!!

    I LOVE those guys from Ouran~ XD I don't remember their names, it's been a while, but AH!!!

  • Juno101
    July 28
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    i think this rhymed good. for a poem of two stanzas i really enjoyed it.


  • orangepeeling
    July 28
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    this was great , .
    brilliant write
    -lani


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 28
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    Terrific poem
    You did good with your rhyme scheme

  • Perfect Insanity
    July 28

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    The rhyming in this poem is very strong-- so Kudos for that! ..As for the content, well I've read a lot about people being torn apart for one thing or another, but the concept of twins is very original. A very realistic poem!

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