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feminine lips

Missing image

 

 

 

feminine lips

      cradled soft thrashes
      and cleansed peach ripples

 

       thirst


       stuck to the roof of her mouth
       like sugar on perspiring skin

 

      and muscle mimicked
        birds of paradise
       
        and melted into
                                 
                                   syrup

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: image
Image credit: "Honey love" by ideea (on deviantart.com)

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Comments

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  • Max Alexandersson
    October 8
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    That was sexier than hell in heals.


  • sgking123
    September 17

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    second comment

    i saw this again...and tell you what........sugar syrup and cradles softies.....took my breatha way again........let me ask you just this....this imagery can come out of only a real epsiode.....was that so........breatakingly beautiful poem my dear....i am glad I have you as a favorite

  • sgking123
    September 1
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    mmmmmand hmmmmmmmmmmm

    wow.....you had me captivated.....sos ensuala ndsoft..loved each word.here are the chosen ones:

    feminine lips

    cradled soft thrashes
    and cleansed peach ripples



    thirst


    stuck to the roof of her mouth
    like sugar on perspiring skin

    visit me and comment em as well

  • celadia
    August 24

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    beautiful imagery and I love the photo, it fits well with the poem but I must say, each would stand without the other if you wanted it to. Congrats on the gold, definitely a winning poem.

  • J Macabre gold member
    August 13

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    A much well deserved gold here. you have the mind thinking many things with your title and how you tell this...very elusive words you have...your an impressive writer.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 5

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    Wow; talk about taste buds...
    I am itching for some honey now!
    This was stunning.. you have such
    a way with words that you never
    leave the reader unsatisfied.
    You bring forth the perfect lingo
    and metaphors, and soft imagery
    to make us want more!

    Love this hun, very well-suited for the prompt

    Best of luck & thanks for entering

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