when she speaks softly
her voice is carried by
the gentle hands of wind;
gliding through leaves,
it evokes a heavy sigh
from even the most
rootless of trees.
In a list
A contest entry
- Beautiful Freeverse by Emmyb.
3500 points, ended July 31, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From July 2009 by amaranthine lover.
1075 points, ended September 6, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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You have used the nature metaphor well here. The language in your poem is poetic and the meaning, richly condensed. Well written...Alby
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This is beautiful indeed poet and well deserving of the Gold.
Congratulations
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So signature of you, I can't expect anything less than this sort of perfection from you! -
Gold to me
I checked!
Well, equal gold
Yes, I am tipsy
BUT STILL!
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I love the gentle beauty in this one.
Pulls at the heart of those rootless trees.
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Ok Ok Ok...usually I can't deal when you write like this jk..but you mastered these words! Very soft tone, but still masculine.
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A GREAT POEM!!! I wasnt able to enter that...
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This is amazing! Great write.
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this is straight up genius.
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Beautiful imagery in such a short piece. Softly powerful and full of depth. So glad you shared it here.
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wow I like this one. Great job. Very deep. I like the way you put her voice as a whisper carried by the gentle hands of the wind. Wow what imagery here. Great job! Thanks for sharing this with us.
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Well done my kind of poetry. Succinct and softly powerful.
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This is lovely Matt. The imagery is awesome - especially the ending, with the "rootless trees"!!!
I don't know if it's really possible, but you just keep getting better at poetry!
(And I wasn't sure if you had it in you to be this loving and sweet anymore) You're quickly becoming one of the most diversified writers on this site in terms of subject, style, tone, etc.
Keep it up man!
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How good it is to find poetry of such depth in just a few words. This is beautifully done and a credit to the author
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damn. that's all i can say. this is powerful stuff.
you're a real writer. not one of the fake ones that throws together a ton of fluffy poetic sounding words and calls it art. you've really got it
thanks for another good read
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I completely agree with your comment!
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I wrote a poem once using the metaphor "wind's hands" as well. this is beautiful and whoever you wrote it for is a very lucky girl. I wish my fiance could write like this. Good luck in the contest.
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Amazing the sounds of a woman's voice is...especially if you deeply care for her...i know how that feels all too well...yearning to hear a certain gals voice now. Best of luck,Matt.
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A nice shorter entry for the contest is always a breath of fresh air and you have written this beyond my expectations - its supurb. My favourite part is the last two lines - really rounds off the poem with a big sigh great work and thanks for entering.
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Beautifully soft, a somewhat rare write from you, wonderfully done.
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Had to stop by to read this once again. So beautiful. Wow.
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You have me smiling with this one, Matt. I remember "someone" telling me (not so long ago) that he doesn't really do love poetry. And I see that someone has it labeled as "sappy" - lolol
You do love poetry well, Matt and this poem just shows HOW well. I love leaves and trees and voices in poetry and here you have almost all of my favourite things together. Hmmm...now you have me wondering if this is about one of my favourite poets too....
Really lovely, lovely poetry. Loved the gentle voice carrying the smoothness of her voice too. The last line is magical. Loved this one. I hope to see more of these "sappy" poems from you from now on!!
~ Nicolette
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Emitting sighs from reading your poetry lately...hmmm makes one wonder lol C
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well done matty-cakes, this is so gentle and sweet. it evoked a heavy sigh from me, that's for sure you really must stop writing so much poetry about me. one would begin to wonder if you might be developing a little crush
. sorry - but a girl can dream, right.
good luck in the contest, friend xx
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love really is in the air, isn't it?
what a soft, romantic piece... you show your honest feelings here, and it's nice to see. this brings out one of the best things you have to offer. a beautiful, beautiful freeverse.
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lol no...i was just mesmerized by a voice
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Yes they can do that, can't they. I fell for a beautiful contented sigh, that will always be in my soul.
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from even the most
rootless of trees.
i liked the end best
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from even the most
rootless of trees.
rootless. i really like that word, esp used here.
makes for a killer end line
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I know who it's for, and she's not a fruit cake, she's a peach.
Beautifully done.
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This made me think of the last Neruda inspired contest that Nicolette and I held - it is lucky for the entrants of the said contest that you didn't enter this, because somebody would be minus a trophy right now
I love all of it, not just because of the sentiment but also its poetic superiority. It's soft and succint and from beginning to end the ideas are perfectly connected - which is apparently a strength of yours by the way. The ending is amazing - those rootless trees
I'm pretty sure that whoever has a voice like this is probably a complete fruit cake
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really, really soft & beautiful.
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"when she speaks softly
her voice is carried by
the gentle hands of wind;"
Thats beautiful, words can't explain how amazingly beautiful that part is to me, just hte image it gives wonderufl and this was a great poem
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well, well... sappy, eh?
yeah...
cynic/romantic, dichotomous set, usually works together...
a truly beautiful poem.
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this is amazing. such beautiful words. i think this is perfect.
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Beautiful
Oh my, this is quite captivating. I immediately thought of Mother Nature. This is beautiful!
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pure brilliance
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I love the "gentle hands of wind" great touch! ...only thought..maybe "when she whispers?" that way it has a much better effect of being "carried by...wind"...uggg..so sorry..just my opinion..I love it no matter how it is just ignore me if you think my advice sucks .....
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hmm I think it probably does sound better as whispers...i will think on that one
thanks
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Wow Matt, that's a great write. (I love that you categorized it as Sappy LOL) I guess I love sappy stuff then.
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i was trying to be 'punny' haha
thank you
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ohhhh!!!! I love the second stanza!! this is so lovely!! I feel that the first stanza can be tweaked a little to match the timeless quality of the second..but such beautiful writing! wonderfully done poet
rootless of trees.
kudo for having perfect imagery
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better?
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