You want to know what I am thinking?
Well, open your ears, because it's coming!
Coming straight at you like a bull
Very angry and agitated.
This is the last time you will ever
Put your hands on me like that!
You had no fucking right
To slap me the way you did.
Yes, I called you a bitch...
You were fucking being one!
Trying to call the police
Because I hit you...
Well, the only reason I did that,
You fucking grabbed me first!
You tried to drag me out of the house
By the fuckign arm!
You grabbed me by the neck,
And threw me on the floor!
You slapped me in the face
And in the head
Knocking me down to the ground
Like you didn't fucking care!
I know you say you love me,
but for once SHOW it.
Stop getting pissy over
The dumbest shit ever!
You want to run everything
That goes on in the house!
But you fucking can't!
I'm sorry to tell you this,
Even your rabbi doesn't believe
That marriage should be
75% 25%... but 50%50%
You want to rule my mother,
but you can't even fule your fucking self!
Yes, God wants you to be leader,
But not the way you are being...
The woman was made from
Adam's ribs... not from his feet
The be walked on...
Not from his head
To be superior!
But from his ribs,
To walk BESIDE.
So come off your high throne
And start being a father to me
Because this is the last time
You will ever put your hands on me
The way you just did.
God shook His head at you for that,
And He shook His head at me
For the things that I did...
I at least apologised for it,
you don't think you owed me one.
What if you had fucking hurt me real bad...
What about the baby... or MOM even!
Or worse, what if I died.
That might make you happy though.
I swear that if you EVER do that again,
You will never see me OR your grandson again.
I do love you, don't get me wrong...
But you will NEVER again do that shit!
Everything that was said and done
Was completely uncalled for.
I am thankful that you gave me a house
To give me shelter...
and food
To keep me healthy...
But I would like it to be "our" place
not just "your" place...
You wonder why no one ever
Wants to come over...
Listen to yourself,
would you want to be around
Someone who does the shit you do?
I don't think so.
Please tell me what you think
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Well, this is a good rant. I don't know if its true, if so, I hope it released some of your anger writing it. I guess its a good excercise to get your anger out.
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vENT POETRY
I have found this writing thing has kept me from the mental ward all of my life. If I put it down with a fat beat I might just make a buck I'm like ..... Well you know the rest as you are a juggalette.
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a good poem
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I am still sitting here stuck on this poem why because it has touched my heart and it tangles ints self inside my soul. It is very unique and I love the way your poems get to me even when I try to avoid the dark side of the moon. Don;t ever give up and stay strong for your future. this to shall pass one day you will be sitting in your own home many years from now and think to your self I am a strong person I lived through all that and am here to tell the tale! Good Luck Kiddo. Your the BEST!! -
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wow. This is very powerful and it is shocking to see a fight right before my eyes as if I were there watching it play out. If I was going to revise it I would first go back and check spelling and cross and the t's and dot all the i's.Author has a true talent gifted to be sure. I am in shock and awe and amzes thank you for sharing this with me!!.It needs some work and I don't have the time to fix it plus I wouldn't change another poets work hardly anyone would unless they are a teacher of some sort. Go back and work on this it is really worth the time to correct it honestly. If I had ms office I would fix it for sure! Good Luck in the v contests!! Mel.
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Whoah this poem is super intense. I loved it a lot but then again its a very intese piece you have here. It was awesome but also showed a lot of emotion that took my breath away. A lot of this I have been through, however I don't have a son, so that part is a little different but I have an abusive father. It's not a fun thing to have and its weird to have a father who will tell you one second he loves me but then the next grab me or choking me. I like how you wrote this in letter format. Good job!
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damn girl! That's a sucky thing to have to deal with! I'm sorry!!!
Hope things are better now. Keep upyour great work! You did an amazing job writing this.
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more of a letter?
It's a little long even for some of the poetry I've read. There's really no pattern or rhyme in it, so it makes it feel more like a direct letter. I am also a little confused on who you are talking about... husband or granfather.. I'm not sure. I think that this peice was really good for venting, and I think you did it well. Thanks for the comment on my poetry. -blessings- -
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I wrote it to my dad... Yeah, it is kinda long... but I' ve seen poetry on here that was a LOT longer.... but yeah... I guess you could say this was pretty much a letter...
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very good poem. i no hes a jerk and shit i wish it never came to that. but maybe in time things will be alright
keep the art alive i love you baby
your FaTMaN
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This poem depicts your energy and strength so well. It displays the anguish and despair of being treated that way and not being able to say its "your own house" but "his house", I feel that is very powerful, because it shows the little power you have over someone else's actions, and how you can do so little. I think this would only make you more frustrated... being unable to change someone else's way of thinking or behaving. Anyway, overall, I think this is a brilliant write, it shows your anguish so well. Great write!!!! -
a good poem though what got me in all of this anger was the fact you said half way through the piece i do love you don't get me wrong - which is madness after all that.
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thank you. I do love my father, just at that moment in time when it all happened... I hated him... (which I mean, do you blame me?)
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Very raw & emotional. I'm sorry this happened.
It's a tough one to be in.
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yes it is tough. Soon I'm going to get a job, a car, then I'm going to find an appartment and move out with my 7 month old son. I need to, even my brother and sister-in-law agree with me.
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Im sorry , Ive been in that situation .. Hopefully you will get out of that situation soon
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thank you for your comment
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I;m so sorry. This is very unfair. He had no right. He should apologize. If your afriad it will happen again maybe you should call the cops. ANyway. My favorite part is:
Yes, God wants you to be leader,
But not the way you are being...
The woman was made from
Adam's ribs... not from his feet
The be walked on...
Not from his head
To be superior!
But from his ribs,
To walk BESIDE.
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im sry. some ppl r just like that. u always have me to talk to.
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I hate that there are people who think it's okay to abuse someone... especially their own kids. sure, I had the one pop on teh mouth coming, but he didnt have to do that shit! that was unfuckingcalled for. he's fuckign lucky there weren't any cops around... he could try to get me arrested for hitting him, but it was self fuckign defense. He was pulling me out of the fucking room. He could have fucking killed me when he grabbed my neck... which was VERY uncalled for! My fiance was on the phone with me as this was happening. that's what's fucking worse. now he DEFINATELY hates my dad. I started the argument, yes... but did I deserve that, no. *sigh* I really need to find a job so I can get out.
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im sry.u didnt deserve it.
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