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still

in dark
quietly crying
crumpled and wasted
gray notes haunt
air above
whispers ache
words cut
quietly crying
in dark.

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  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    December 1
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    air above whispers ache....oh my this is stunning...delicious in its entiity...seems to have a pulse all its own


  • bluewho
    August 11

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    Haunting

    This is haunting. It made me hurt for you. Your ability to pull in the reader and make them feel is amazing.


  • sheltered
    August 7
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    good rhythm/flow
    "quietly crying" nice phrase


  • ivoire gold member
    August 5

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    soul touching

    Beautiful words to describe moments of despair. Wonderful poem! It really touched me.

    ivoire


  • individuality gold member
    July 31

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    a good poem penned, well we all have to shed a few tears here and there, to release the madness inside which has been gathered during the course of the days, and after the tears, the smiles can dance again.


  • Rick Weston silver member
    July 31
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    ahhhhh, so well done, bring the reader into the dark with you.


  • ScarsFade
    July 31

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    this sad personal portrait of you haunts me but in the best of ways...this was a sad image but a very vivid one that i really liked reading for the depth and the pain it was very telling...pleas keep writing you are amazing...much <3....scars.

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