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try me


i know i am unwell
when everything i stare at
has roots rapidly growing
under the surface

rippling world
you are a mirage of vultures




i've accidentally become hooked
on self mutilation
on achieving a concave core

my belly will look like
it has been worried away by
lappings of water.

(curved for lips to run down
for icicles to run down)


forcing mounds of heavy earth
out again
to transform myself from turnip to tulip

can i now spread my  pretty pink lips for you
tear out my every jem and press their pleasures into your shoulders and back

relax baby,
no strings no guilt no regrets.

ecstacy to me is being able to bring pleasure to someone by twirling and twisting my insides over and around them
i live to fulfill so i must be as compact and durable as possible.

i'm so messed up don't try to give me love just let me indulge in you

a perfectionist beneath my crocus disguise

i bruise myself through and through

i need a different kind of sustenance



addicted to becoming
an acrobatic sex toy.

Author notes

my body must be in peak performing condition
slim strong bendable

obsessive.

skinny love

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  • hilly
    July 28

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    I was once completely obsessed with being thin, about two years ago. It was for different reasons though, I think it was really important to me to wear this image of self-control. I preached shit like "your body is a temple" and "you shouldn't eat animals" and "everything you eat contributes to the time and reason that you're going to die" etc. And I guess I liked that I looked very sexual. But in the end, I was too tired to enjoy most things and got so thin that it wasn't sexual anymore, it was gross. I'm just trying to say, I really relate to this.

    As for my critique, I think the manner in which you approached the poem and the topic is very plain, very straight-forward. Generally, I like writing to include devices that portray the writers emotions, tone etc on a deeper level than the simplicity of what you're saying does. For this reason, I am removing the poem. But I'd really like to thank you for entering anyway.


    • LadyAmalthea
      July 28
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      thanks for the comment! Maybe i will look at it again another time and try to give it more depth. I hadnt written in a while and just like blehed out what i was thinking.
      Your reasons too are mine but my poem was just about one aspect of it.
      =D good luck with your contest.