The crocus dips its blossomed head
As if to say winter is dead:
And tulips flying high,
Give praise to clear and sunny skies
The pansies blush in mid air confusion
The hyacinths in wild profusion:
Wink their lovely petaled eyes,
To every robin flying high
On muted wings in the gentle breeze
Fluttered leaves in towering trees:
For gentle spring has come at last,
Rejoiced my heart,tis gray repast
Author notes
Pic found at www.deviantart by ceara_finn24
I had to go look at about 30 pages before I picked this one.....
Number of words in this poem ..........68
Hugs
Susan~~~
Please tell me what you think
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I really like the rhyme and imagery here!
Great job with this piece
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Your words were perfect for your picture. In Idaho, this year, spring came slowly and passed quickly into summer. It felt like we only had a couple of weeks of spring. Beautiful write, Sis.
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spring rules
i look forward to spring after long winters. your poem give that same expectant feeling .
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what a beautiful picture
and you did great justice to it with your words..the stanzas are lovely with wonderful imagery/depth ..well done 
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A classic... really superb and wonderfully descriptive of nature at its best.
You've outdone yourself which is really GREAT!
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oh my oh my oh my
I LOVE THIS, IT IS MAYBE MY FAVEROIT OF YOURS, i SEE GOLD!!!!
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Oh My~
Wow Sis!
This is one Beautiful piece penned also the weaving of words
with its flow...just Captivating
Adore how You presented this verse along with the picture
Wahooooooo~
You take us there Sis!
I had my bags all packed too
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
Best wishes in the contest
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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Rejoice indeed!
Susan!
I've been away too long, my friend. What a pleasure to return and find that you are still going (and growing) strong. This poem is clear and full of promise. I can feel the bluster and the warmth. I can smell the fragrance. The use of pathetic fallacy is expertly effective; I am moved as you intended. I'm sure, as I continue to read more of your work, that I shall not be as disappointed as I usually am with most of the undisciplined and vulgar drivel found here at AllPoetry.
Some mechanical critique: I believe [...mid-air...] should be hyphenated, and an apostrophe added to [...'tis...], which is a contraction of "it is." I'm unclear with your changing to past tense (twice) in the last verse and I wonder if [...grey repast...] is meant to be possessive of [...heart...], or the subject of the verb phrase [...it is...]. But please to remember - I'm the one that put the "anal" in analysis.
Regardless of my confusion, this is one I'd happily read to my grandkids.
Gazzelle
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This is lovely my dear friend! This is lovely with the subtle rhyming and flow. I love flowers and you used their beauty to express human emotion in a most delightful way by giving them a personality. Standing ovations!
Love,
Amera♥
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A beautiful look into the picture. Such great discription of the flowers that it gives one the feeling of being on a garden and can almost smell them.
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aw sis this is beautiful I love your imagery throughout good luck inthe contestmaralisa
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You have a wonderful talent for writing such beautiful poems on nature.. the imagery in this makes one feel as if we see the flowers and hear the birds chirping..you make the rhyme and flow seem so easy as well.. Just lovely. I wish you all the best.
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Excellent
What a terrific write for the theme. Such a beautiful picture too. Best of luck in the contest
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Sweet!
The wonderful smell of spring. Such a fine poem to grace the days of rebirth as light and airy as the season itself. Enjoying the difficult rhyme to a splendor. Well done again young lady. Keep up the fine work and best of luck to you in the contest and in life. Rick
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