Hands like frozen marble caress with care
His hard, statuesque body
Pressed against mine
Sending chills down through my skin
Cold lips explore my shoulder
Eventually discovering my neck
Fingertips make their way down my abdomen
Kisses follow close behind
Lost in a vampire fantasy
A world unknown to most
So sweet a moment although incomplete
If only he would give the ‘kiss of change’
So we could truly be one
Author notes
BOOK(s): Twilight Saga
Prompt: Bite me
100 words or less (I have 70 words)
Written from Bella's perspective.
Gotta love Twilight! 
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A contest entry
- QUICKIE!! Word Prompt! by Jade.Butterfly.
600 points, ended July 27, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything goes!!!! I want an AP family and friends list!! by saz 09.
460 points, ended September 20, 77 entries
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Comments
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This is a interesting poem and I lie how it flows so innocently. However in order for it flow a little better; instead of
"Eventually discovering my neck
Fingertips make their way down my abdomen"
say this
"ever so slowly discovering my neck
fingertips trail their way downwards"
Just an idea, but otherwise great write!
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Dark, but with purpose. Usually never heard of, so I I like it. Well done -CC
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Yeah, you really do gotta love twilight. I liked this.
It wasn't all 'Oh my God Edward is sooo hot!' like others I've seen
Thanks for entering and best of luck to you
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It's a great write from bella's pov...sorry my contest didn't work out..if I have another one for Twilight...make sure you enter...
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Loved it.
I love this, I am probably the only guy to have read the entire series of Twilight, but only at the start was I doing it just to keep up with what my child was reading. After Chapter 2 of the first book I was hooked, addicted. I even helped a couple of musician friends submit music for the new moon soundtrack. They didn't get a spot, but we tried. I will be showing this to my daughter tonight and with your permission I would like to print a copy of this poem and put it on my wall of fame I have. It's a collection of poems from other writers I have come in contact with and a way to keep my self inspired. Are you game?
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Thanks! Yes, you may print it out! I have another Twilight poem called Vino De Bella!
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hehe this is awesome! The kiss of change, so apt! love the way you have brought in a very sensual image into this! was a good read. Edward <3
great write here!
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Yay! Omg, this is so good
I love how vivid it is You're sooooo good Lozl, Edward's hot 
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Good write. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Short and sweet this was the first "Vampire" write I've ever read on this site and It was a great first I really liked this oh and gratz on the H.M
That you have won so far Amazing write
Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck
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yummy i ate these words lovely work full of delicious scenes mmm nice feed of sensual poetry indeed
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I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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wow, This was..umm..yeah..just great !
I really liked your take on this prompt..
"hands llike frozen marble caress with care"
That sent a shiver down my skin..
"cold lips explore my shoulder eventually discovering my neck"
Oh how delicious!
Yeah I totally saw and felt the scene of the Vampire biting here.
Nicely done.
Thanks for entering and good luck!
-Mandi
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