Killing myself without you
My soul needs you
Life is death when you're not here
Come back to me so we can
Go back to what we were
This only happened once before
I am so lost and confused
I keep reminding myself
How I'm not okay
My arms are open
But you're not here
Miles can't diminish the thoughts
Parting has never been a sweeter sorrow
Author notes
this isn't meant to be a good write. i didn't put any thought whatsoever into this... i wrote it at camp.
Comments
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i like how it doesn't have a beat, it's different. I really like the ending lines, idk why they just made the poem pop. good job.=].
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I think that you have a really great start here. A little revision could mold this poem into something very widely relatable and monumental. My suggestion is to add some imagery or bring in some of the five human senses. Make the reader really feel what you are saying. Like I said, your direction with this poem is very strong! Awesome write!
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