Down the dark and dusty path,
all that was has come to pass,
and all that is has yet to be,
for all I have is destiny,
So speak the words I seldom hear,
and let me know you hold me dear,
for fate and love has parts to play,
and even though I dark this day,
the crowd has yet to turn and speak,
for in this knowledge they do seek,
a mind they may but call their own,
and ask upon to take the throne,
a god they may but fall and pray,
until the night does dark this day,
and in this dust they may but die,
for all I dream is but a lie.
Author notes
this was written while i was sitting next to my girlfriend in bed and she aksed me to recite a poem, so instead I wrote one.
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Really enjoyed this write. Found it to flow well. The ryme was right on que as well but when I finish the second verse I was out of breath. Maybe a little stanza's would give the reader time to take it in and breath while enjoying this wounderful poem. I applaud you though there is no way I could write on request. I find it hard enough to write when I'm alone. Cheers to you.
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Aww if someone ever wrote me a poem half as wonderful and awesome as this I'd be there's forever. This is just about the most perfect and well written poem I've heard in so long. My favorite line was "and in this dusk they may but die for all I dream is but a lie" those lines touched me...like they opened old scars anyways great write keep up the good work
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Thanks for the comment i appreciate it, and I am glad you liked it
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awww this is cute!!! i think that line 9 "the crowd has yet to turn and speak" is sounding kind of awkward
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