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Within my heart

 

 

 

In the evening starlit sky
heaven shimmer
within the eye

Walk along in knee high grass
some quiet place

where I forget

the past

Etch your face into my heart
so love like diamonds 
don't break apart

Kiss the scent upon the winds
hold you close
pray it never
ends

We'll dance on moonbeams just you and I
and dream those dreams
that never die

 

 

 

 

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  • Vampress Alayna silver member
    September 16

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    *tears*

    i love it! full of loving kind words!! Best wishes !!


    -Vampress Alayna


  • albymyheart gold member
    September 6

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    Lovely thoughts on love. Nice and peaceful to read...Alby


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    July 30

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    so beautiful.... i picture you walking in the blue moon lit night,
    as if i saw you with her ... the one you speak of ~sighs~ i saw the enter
    action of your love and you both held your dreams in your hands so
    close with delicate ease....and a prayer did cover them .. this is
    so Poetic... just goregeous!!

    Blessings always

    Rend


  • Jesann gold member
    July 29

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    I really love the depth of feeling in this poem.
    It reads to me that even though you're physically "walking along knee high grass" that spiritually, or in your mind you are in a different place...beyond the physical.
    This is my perception of it, but I may well be wrong.
    I really loved this poem, an excellent read.


  • tara wilson gold member
    July 28
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    this is interesting to me that this feels like vignettes even though it's separate verse of rhyme. these moments are very beautiful Tony.


  • Nicolette gold member
    July 28

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    I agree with Chez - you do rhyme so very well. I almost didn't notice the rhyming, it was done so smoothly and that is what I like about rhyming poems. Wonderful lyrical quality about this poem, and as always, delivered in that soft and romantic voice of yours. Beautiful, Tony.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Cannonsfire
    July 27
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    It's so nice to see you rhyme because you do it so very well, it's been awhile since that pen of yours graced the pages and it was worth the wait C


  • Poetess12
    July 27
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    I like the rhyme and flow of your poem.
    "We'll dance on moonbeams just you and I
    and dreams those dreams
    that never die"

    I love those lines

    Thank you for your entry.


  • Daizee silver member
    July 27
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    I agree with Carolina Moon It takes a special man to show the tender, romantic side to him that you so well.


  • Desire gold member
    July 27

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    Precious~

    Wow!
    Oh My Word this tugs at the Heartstrings
    Powerful piece You have versed my Friend
    also what images to swell the eyes

    Bravo!
    Happy to see that quill dancing
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    July 27
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    This is so beautiful. great write.


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    July 27

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    It's great to read such softness from a guy's heart This is amazing Tony..the imagery, depth of emotions and also the rhyme! I adored all of it but especially the line " Etch your face into my heart" aww..doesn't get much more beautiful than this! All the best to you.

  • Bob Fox
    July 27
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    Poet

    Tis a beauty. The soft melody of love that outwieghs the everday agonies of reality. Excellent piece of writing.


  • chilali
    July 27
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    such gorgeous imagery through out this poem. i enjoyed the flow and the word choice. thanks for sharing this and good luck in the contest

    much love,
    ylova

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