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A Life in The Day of...........

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While nature hides her offspring deftly wound
in paper shroud; seems only death befitting,
to fool us all in secret she will hide,
emerging safely; predators defied.
Then dazzling all she dances, sunlight flitting;
a freedom envied by those cocoon bound.

Choose carefully the life you think is best;
for just one day some butterflies are blessed.

How many chances came and yet we found
each one passed by to find us here; still sitting
complaining now that many times we tried;
yet only to ourselves we know we lied
and though a different life may seem more fitting,
to spread our wings still keeps us on the ground.

Author notes

photo by Simon: http://www.beakerst.shutterchance.com/photoblog/Feeler/

This example is a BearWoman Butterfly Sonnet with fully enveloped wings (the form standard), written in iambic pentameter with feminine rhymes in Lines 2, 5, 10, and 13, and intentional variations to the meter in Lines 5, 13, and 14. It is written in a “classical” sonnet form with the first stanza (wing) containing one aspect of the theme, the body containing the summation and volta, and the final stanza (wing) containing the rebuttal or post-volta aspect.

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  • Nickelspring gold member
    July 30
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    I love this! I love the two aspects and how you have woven them in the middle couplet. Beautifully written
    K


  • Pattiboo silver member
    July 28

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    I'm showing my ignorance here this form of sonnet is new to me and I had to read it several times to get the rhythm.

    Choose carefully the life you think is best
    ‘tis only for one day this jewel is blessed.

    This implies they only live for one day, several species migrate long distances and most hibernate, or am I reading this wrong?

    I really like the final stanza it has an uncomfortable ring of truth about it I'm sure we have all lied to ourselves and made excuses.

    I'm off to google more information about this form of sonnet thank you for a very enjoyable read and hopefully some more poetic knowledge gained.


    • passim silver member
      July 28
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      Made a quick change here to highlight that some live only for a day. Many thanks.

  • Bad Bill
    July 27
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    This is an excellent example of the "butterfly" sonnet - beautifully developed and finely written.
    I'm impressed.

    Bill