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Antidote

I wish I could just really say what I want.
Is it that hard to get this thing grant?
Well lately I've been feeling so down.
It's like every time i take a breath, I drown.

I really do wanna get away from this problem,
even though I don't really know how to say it to em.
It simply makes me feel weak.
I'm trying to find something that is impossible to seek.

I'm afraid that things could even get wost,
by getting to the point where I'll really burst!
But I just realized something on my mind,
Her single, smile was the antidote that was impossible to find.

Please tell me what you think :) (honestly)

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  • zeth61592
    July 27

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    I love the last line. It explains exactly how i feel currently. The only parts i dont like are lines 6 and 9. They use words that are either not words at all or i dont understand. The rhyming is a little rough. It could be that i am not very knowledgable when it comes to words, so excuse me if i am. I like the title also. To me it explains that you are searching for not a physical cure but just something that will get you out of your "problem" you keep mentioning. Overall the poem does speak to me and i really enjoyed it.