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nothingness of life

i don't want to lie to you
i felt strongly about you
felt is past tense

i am incapable of feeling anymore
you took away that pleasure
along with others

i can not love
i can not hate
i can not feel

along with my virginity
you took my ability to feel
how ever pain is etched across my heart

across my legs my arms and stomach
is where the pain shows through
where you could see blood

you took my happiness
and only filled me with a feeling of uselessness
you killed me

i have thought of taking my life
as you did my virginity
that meant nothing to you why should my life

i gave you everything
the only thing
i knew about me

i knew i was a virgin and i gave it to you
thinking i meant something
i see now i mean nothing
to everyone!!!

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