Through half moon eyes
the sun
lays her lashes
upon languished cheek.
With the din of life a distant echo
in a mind that is weary and weak,
her heart beats the cadence
of a lover’s lullaby
sung in the soothing breath
of the wind.
Arms outstretched,
she reaches
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and calls him home.
Please tell me what you think
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aw this is real good
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Thank you.. I'm glad you liked it
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The softness of the poem is what will attract people at first, but beneath that gentle song there is a little tale that is intriguing:
In the middle of nature (but is she in nature, or is nature in her mind...I think it's actually the latter, or more likely, both. She hears the wind, a voice calling...a loved one, either far away, once upon or having passed on...but she hears the voice and welcomes it's arrival.
That's the true beauty of this poem for me.
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I love how you perceive things
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I know I've read and commented on this in the past, but I enjoyed it again, so why not give props again.
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warm soft and wonderfull
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beautiful...the warmth of this radiates and soothes.
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class with gentle animation and calling him home just ended it wonderfully
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Thanks Glenn. I must have been getting in touch with my smooshy side.. lol
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I love the soft sensuality in this...and the longing of a lover's touch.
I can imagine the shadow of lashes on cheek as she gazes through those half moon eyes at the one she loves.
(Sigh)...dang, Stace....you made me go all romantical.
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Aww our lost lamb has returned! Good to see ya Amy You've been mised.
Thank you...
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this is so powerful
the end just serves a powerful punch
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Beautiful soothing tone with a soft hint of yearning lulling the reader into the moment you've created with your signature way with words.
Definitely one of my favorites of yours although it's a difficult process to chose.
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Nice write. There's a really nice feel to this piece, and I can see why it is as popular as it is.
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Thank you...
Stacy
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a good poem, ah love, it can be so soft and subtle and smiling at times, welcoming the sighs that flaot from lips, half moon eyes - i like that imagery in fact i am going to rob it lol and seal it in a vault so it can not be used by anyone again but me.
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Lol.. be my guest
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My turn to Sigh.......
And smile... RHYME!!!!! Reading this just now was such a serene moment... there is a sadness of lonely longing in the words.... but it is so delicate and soft... it invokes sighs and wistful thoughts of being seperated from the person who holds ones heart.
Your subtle whipser of rhyme in the middle section worked so well and provides it with an easy meandering sense of flow. I like your background colour and layout too... it fits perfectly.
It is always so enjoyable to read you.... even if it is better late than never huh?
More sighs......
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Close your eyes, feel the sun on your lashes and imagine him standing right in front of you...sighs..yep just like that C
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It's definitely worth closing one's eyes
Thank you...
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Beautiful work, such a soft and soothing tone that fills the heart with a peaceful feeling.Bring him home girl, loved this
Tony
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i have often found another person to be a feeling of being 'home', even though we could be far away from it. this is really lovely.
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Wow. I love this. So soft and gentle. The flow is amazing throughout and the imagery - even more amazing.
Thanks for commenting on one of my poems. It is much appreciated. This is the first I've read by you but I can assure you that it won't be the last - I really enjoyed this one and I look forward to reading more
Great work here - seriously. Bravo!
Love,
Ylova
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Thank you. That's how I felt when I stumbled upon one of yours. I'm always thrilled when I click someone new and find myself totally absorbed in their words. I look forward to seeing you post more.
Love,
Stacy
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Why color the world with so many explicatives when all you need to say has been said, when all you need to know has been taught a million times, these words they reach out and touch, they make you feel so complete, call him what you will, lover, husband or even just a simple man.
Love is and will always be the thing that colors life and these words you have said could run a million heart beats.
I like it, I like it so!
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Thank you
I agree with your comment about love. It is the basis of all things and colors our lives in ways indescribable. It seemed fitting on such a beautiful summer afternoon to color it with shades of that love
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I so love the lazy, laid-back, half-open-eyes feel about this poem, and the softness, the contentment of the mood you've created here, Stacy. One of those poem one just wants to wrap yourself in and smile and smile. This is so lovely!
Always good to see a new one from your pen
~ Nicolette
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Her heart beat the thrum of life
echos in his lonely soul, stirring his spirit
he can do naught but follow,
his love awaits at the other end.
I can answer this but poetically, a feeble attempt, but heart felt.
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There is nothing feeble about your reply. Love the stirring of the spirit~I think we've probably all been moved in such a way and can do nothing but respond
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Arms outstretched,
she reaches
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and calls him home.
What a perfect ending. But, the call here is over both distance and time, it would seem, for this is a memory, a dream, a lullaby. But, nothing is impossible in the context of a summer afternoon when the sun hits just the right angle we can do and be anything, go anywhere, or anywhen. That, of course, is the true beauty of a summer's afternoon.
Excellent. Dreamy.
Garrison
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Is that not what summer afternoons are made for? To dream and call a lover home?
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eloquent, pretty, imaginative, lovely, descriptive... hot damn this poem is everything I'm not! grrr, now I'm just plain jealous.
seriously, I loved it.
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Now that is just a bunch of BS and you know it! lmao..geez
Thank you for reading it though.. you're crazy haha *rolf*
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Oh, how sweet - a home named Jerome or Chuck... when the bough breaks... there's something within the inner reaches of this poem that is most difficult to pacify... can't quite point it out, but I'll consult the bones and get back to you...
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Let me know when you find out. .i hate unpacifieds when I dont know why LOL
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the bones are silent, so I suppose we're all meant to remain unpacified about this one...
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Such contentment and comfort here lass..
it has the stillness of a warm lake on a summers day,
a long journey to a last destination.
You have a flare with this sort of soft and beautiful poetry.
i am never disappointed little gypsy,
it thrills me that such a writer
comments on the likes of my ramblings...
if whispered it sounds like a prayer.
Beautiful,
Liam.
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Aww thanks Liam
I love your writing so don't ever stop
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This is so visually appetizing that I am at a loss for words here!
That opening line is a stunner... gosh, I wished I had written that!
Hell, I wished I had written this entire poem to be honest, it is freakin'
mind bogglin full of creative talent.
I had to chuckle just a tad bit when I saw you had this listed in " my own style" because when I read it I had to look over to see who wrote it, you or sweet, seems I do that a lot with you two, you write a lot alike and you think a lot alike, I often wonder if you are not one and the same or at least twins. ( don't tell me though because I think I prefer the mystery of it all)
Absolutely beautiful write... oh, love the title too
Hugs,
Suzi
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I'm still laughing over the PS so I had to comment on that first.. lmao
I think your comment was definitely 5star worthy and I don't like the new standards (incase Kevin is reading.. lol )
I always choose 'my own style' because I'm not really sure what my style even is... lol. I just write how my words come out and hope for the best
You, my friend, are the best. Thank you for such a detailed comment and your sweet words
Stacy
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this is so nicely done, with a soft quality. i really like the impression evoked with the line "with the din of life a distant echo"
Bravo.
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Thanks Rick sometimes that din of life is a roar in our ears.. lol
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You just kick me in the mind right off the bat. ~~Through half moon eyes
the sun
lays her lashes
upon languished cheek.~~ How good is that? Better than anything i could ever write.-Period.
Welcome back. and straight to the front page- i hope.
Joe
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Hey Joe.. love your new pic! How cute.
Thanks for your comment and you've been missed too. Good to be back
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I'm adding Brilliant to all that has been said, a superb piece, deserving
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Aww thank you
I'm glad you liked it
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oh.. where do i begin...
i see her with eyes barely opening in the morning, letting the light filter through her lashes, wanting to open fully, but afraid that she will see an emptiness where he once was.
the lullaby that soothed with its steady beat has stopped, leaving a gentle breeze with his exit, which still soothes, but has taken him to another home who has called him.
for me, it is like the other day when the wind was blowing, and i twirled outside, letting my eyes close, wanting any cares i had to leave... and so i just spun as wind blew through my hair and i thought about someone... extending my arms as an invitation. too bad i had to open my eyes.
as always, you can take words that others read and can interpret into their own lives with such ease.
wonderful, stacy
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Your outside twirling comment is exactly where this came from.. lol. Sometimes I think we share the same life.. too funny..haha
I hate opening my eyes too... but the view sure is great when they are closed
Thank you....
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i am not that creative, it takes me forever to write a poem. but when i see a write and it moves me i am at a loss for words, and i just dont have the
words that would give a poet such as your self the Honor that is rightfully due,
so I say what words do come. they are always heartfelt and loving,
that you are an amazing Poetess, and i am honored to be able to read you and
feel the Rays of your light on my face
Blessings & love always
Rend
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I don't need long eloquent comments. I know yours are always from the heart and that means more to me than anything. I'm blessed to call you my friend and sister in poetry
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I'm missed reading the beauty you always pen my friend. You have a gift of expressing things so amazingly. Though this one seems a bit sad, I hope you're doing ok .
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I'm doing so much better and I've missed you
I hope to be back 'in the groove' soon. My pencil has grown dull.. lol
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I come back and the first thing I saw was your poem.. Naturally I had to click on it like always I can give you the typical response ..aka "amazing! Wonderful!" and of course both will be right but since Kenvin is encouraging more "thoughtful comments" here's a few lines from an avid reader
I Love the beginning.. The words you chose "sun" and moon at first made me think that this will be a nature poem.. And then the next few lines made me think of death.. "cadence of a lover" made me think of something quite
sad.. But then the finishing touch almost make me think of religious reference .. But I doubt that's what you had in mind .. Again the finishing line gives a great "Ah!" moment and makes me want to reccommend you haiku 
Your poems alway have such deep perspective and thought.. They make a profound read...
Nicely written poet!
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Lol.. I told you I had pencil in hand earlier I think a little left to the imagination can turn the poem very personal for those who read, almost like you can relate it to an instance in your life. Maybe how I write the words come across totally different to you as you read. As long as you take something away from my words, I am happy
Thank you for always being so kind to me
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