cracks of wind
tall grasses in sway
goldenrod hues
Author notes
Form;
contemporary Haiku
Zen
1 edit 7/29
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku101 by crivanea.
400 points, ended July 30, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I try to be concise when I write my Haiku, always open for suggestions
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hmmm seems we had the same thoughts of wheat swaying...
congrats on the Silver shiny
Juls
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Nicely penned, very effective word use.
Congrats!
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Hmmmm... This one made me think... i really like it. It has a good image to it. Congrats on silver -- well deserved, for a wonderful write.
Beautiful
--Perception -
Better
a poem can always be improved and no poem is ever finished
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I have a funny feeling I will revise this again lol
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ohhh!! I so adore this KU! now there's one I haven't heard yet "goldenrod hues" ..lovely imagery with this! the beginning line was perfect! actually I'm not sure about filler words in haiku..but when I read this
in cracks of wind
slow sway of tall grasses
perhaps it can be read more like:
in cracks of wind
slow sway the tall grasses
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that way there's no repetition of "of" and it flows better...just a suggestion nicely written poet
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ive taken the liberty of editing this...hope you dont mind
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excellent~
You always have excellent haiku's
I love this one..........
Best of luck in the contest
I hope you get a trophy for this one
I just posted another new one
I hope you drop by you better *mean*
Love ya Mally
Hugs
Susan~~~
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oh ya...makes me want to strip off clothes and run naked thru a field....
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that I would love to see
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and this is golden
loved the picture I see here...it stays in the mind...
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You're so sweet... thanks esteblle
happy to see you I did feel sort of dreamy too
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