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Make Me Smile

Cause me to feel your love
Simply by thinking your name.

Have me loose my self in thought,
Contemplating your return.

Make yourself the very last thing I see
Behind my eyes, before I drift to sleep.

Let me whisper my secrets in your ears,
As childish as they are.

Laugh at my jokes,
As I laugh at yours.

Make my face light up,
As your smile melts all my defenses.









♥

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I love, love stories ! The book Im reading is so captivating. *siggghhh* : ) Hmmm..... *lost in thought*

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  • nadine.
    September 26

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    aaaw this is so great! its liglhthearted nature is amazingly done.


  • Nomadic Prince
    September 12

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    I love this, the only thing that I would change as I look at it and it's not that big of a deal is the word "jokes", I wish "Wittery" were a word, as in "Laugh at my wittery as I laugh at yours." , I might advise you to use it other wise, I think it would be clever and between you and me, it wouldn't stop me from using it, how else do words come into existence?


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    July 29

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    "As I laught at yours." in this line LAUGHT should be LAUGH. I really like the write you did a good job on it. I takes so many feelings and compounds them into one sweet poem. I like it indeed I do thank you for sharing.


  • firefly smile
    July 26
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    mushy sugery ooey gooey love - filled. haha


  • Shelby K
    July 26

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    this is such a romantic and beautiful poem. i really liked it. keep up the great writing and i look forward to reading more of your poetry soon.


  • Emi-Decora
    July 26
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    ohh this is very romantic & adorable :3


  • PuRfekly-Phlaw3d
    July 26
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    very sweet.
    and very good !

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