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A mad man's prayer

Dear heavenly Father
The reason why I stand at your gates holdin two revolvers
Cuz down on earth I had mad drama
Protect my body from the tabernacle of robbers
I pray that an angel take my body
Before the doctors have a chance to do an autopsy
Buryin me near Bob Marley,
Surround me by his poetic posse
What I know shocks me,
Six-six-six, illuminati,
and Lord seems to have forgotten me
I put every word in my diary
So in time,
every eye can see
Send death to the world,
that's haunted
Kill 'em with torment,
let the beast rise,
that lies dormant
No more life insurance or police warrants,
Dear heavenly Father,
Dont Forgive me
For my sin's
becaue i know
A life of sin
Is all there is.

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The Street Reverend

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  • vampireblood
    5 hours ago
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    This was really good, I enjoyed reading this. Theres always going to be sin no matter what, which is why I liked your last few lines the best.
    Thanks for entering and good luck to you in my contest.

    ~Vampy


  • ubercrazygirl gold member
    October 25

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    I love the idea of this one, the inner struggle of one who knows what they are doing in life is not what is considered 'right' in the eyes of someone who may be higher than us all (if you believe) and struggles with that on a daily basis because of how their life was handed to them. It seems as if they are searching to make it better but keep getting beaten down by circumstances. Thank you for entering, I truly enjoyed this.


  • walkingstick98
    September 29
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    Spoken like a true mad man..Great job i really like this. Thanks for entering


  • mitchybaby
    August 31
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    What a deep poem. I love it! Thank you for entering and good luck

  • poets whisper silver member
    August 4

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    true we are born into sin because of Adam and Eve, but that was dealt with. Interesting write. Thanks for entering and I look forward to reading your 2nd entry.


  • Enrinye
    August 3

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    I actually did like this piece, the flowing, the passion in it but as the first commenter said you actually don't ask for forgiveness which is the topic of my contest...

    still, it is a good write, well penned, the only thing I didn't like was that you chose a left alignment for this piece...I don't know if it was part of the rules for another contest but it would look better with a center alignment, especially, as you have many short lines...

    and a tiny thing, instead of writing ''six-six-six'' you could have used 666 to make it more obvious because it took me a while to see what you were talking about...

    good luck and take care
    Suza


  • Koenigsreich
    July 27

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    I love the prayer motif here, and that you don't ask forgiveness because it is, as you say, all there is. You stand and accept what is to come because you lived the best you could. Good write!


    • TheStreetReverend
      July 28
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      Thanx for the comment and Thank you so much for understanding what I was actually saying....Gods Bless

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