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Idle

The clouds of sadness cry for opened Earth,
as veils of black collect throughout the years.
For death will raise another nasty birth,
while sorrow holds the hand of creeping fears.

The chairs sit quiet; longing for the weight,
of laughing memories, taken to flight.
They cringe as puddles muddy up life's fate,
so idle in the mourning's hated sight.

A scattered tissue decorates the scene,
where family forgets propriety.
The children wonder why death is so mean,
while momma spills another cup of tea.

The only sound the empty chair now hears;
the sobs that keep company with the tears.

Author notes

Prompt: Empty Chairs; English Sonnet
Rhyme Scheme: abab cdcd efef gg

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  • Howard Manser gold member
    October 26

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    Very Nice

    A very nice enjoyable read with a short but complete story sealed with a bow:
    "The only sound the empty chair now hears;
    the sobs that keep company with the tears."

    Howard

  • Topnotchsy
    August 21

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    Sad write here.

    These lines really hit me:

    "The only sound the empty chair now hears;
    the sobs that keep company with the tears."

    Nice write. I always like a good Shakespearean Sonnet!!


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    July 27
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    Beautiful sonnet
    elegant and stunning
    what a pleasure to read
    God bless you my friend...


  • PerVirtuous
    July 26
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    What a thoughtful and deep sonnet. Good luck in the contest.


  • passim silver member
    July 26

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    This sad sonnet certainly fits the prompt - a row of empty, lonely chairs. I like it. I have trouble with the rhythm in places. Each line should give a feel of de-dah-de-dah-de-dah-de-dah-de-dah with the stress on dah. For example in this line: For death raises another nasty birth, to me it's not natural for the stress to land on the 2nd syllable in the word raises, so I would have put 2 words there such as 'will raise'.Does this flow better then? I think so. Smashing sonnet, just needs a couple of little tweaks and it will be perfect.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    July 26

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    ooooh, i remember having to write a sonnet for my English class. I really like how you wrote this piece. I like sonnets, theya re always cool to read. Keep up your amazing work, and I wish you the best of luck!

    TwiztidMaggot

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