R/a/z/o/r/e/d white hair d
r
a
p
e
d
over the edge .
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. .of this now lonely b.e.d
Can't recall much after my c*r*a*s*h through the {looking glass}
Diagnosis,, silly girl with a crush
Pills drop & dissolve like pixie dust
Can't help the way my feet make <3LOVE<3 to your ever
G_R_O_W_I_N_G_Shadow_________________
& & The further you stray..the harder I try to make you [STAY]
~RETURN~ to make these passionless limbs alive again
P/L/E/A/S/E
Bring back the roses__for__they are dying before my eyes.......
I fear that I have fallen much too hard this time
The splinters of glass in my heart dig deeper
Insomnia has become my habit
while the sheets slowly strangle my slender neck
I can/n/o/t escape this longing for death anymore than I can escape
the reality that you
really left
Author notes
my first attempt at dirty pretty so helpful advice is welcome. i am very proud of the poem itself and hope i did this justice since i have grown to love the style of emo and dirty pretty.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautifully chaotic...Max
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I like it very much but I have no idea how to really do this form any justice. But I do like the poem that is a given.
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Great job. This is a style that I just cant get a grip on and you my dear did a fabulous job. Of course I never would have doubted that you could.
you are a very brilliant poet after all. I miss writing every day and I miss reading poetry and chatting with people like you. I am so glad that you are still around. Love this poem.
Despair
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oh i absolutely love it.
it made my heart ache and took me back to every broken heart
it's incredible, i love the way you did the spacing
i write a lot of the same stuff & have a few dirtypretty poems, please take a look?
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Gorgeous write, as always doll.
I have a love/hate relationship with this style...
Done right, adored.
Done wrong, loathed.
And for this first attempt-
Yours, is definitely adored.
Bravo.
X.
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an awesome first attempt at dirty pretty welldone and goodluck xx
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This is sad and yet so beautiful. You did a wonderful job, thank you.
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The way you constructed this
adds so much emotional depth ..fractured and falling
I love it and I wish you all the best
in the contest!
~Pastel
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Nice write!
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