Come on in and sit right down
Leave your mind outside the door
I’ll teach you what you need in life
Your dreams I shall ignore
Stifle that artistic urge
Your thoughts belong to me
You can’t be what you want
Very soon you will agree
Just follow all our stagnant rules
Don’t think outside the box
Your thoughts will stay within our lines
Under rusted chains and locks
No common sense within these walls
Education is what you need
Free thinking causes problems
Planting deadly seeds
I‘m the authority in your world
You’ll listen and obey
Regurgitating what I feed you
Or else you’ll rue the day
How dare you question what I say?
You’re nothing but a child
I’ll form your mind the way I want
Now sit up straight and smile
Author notes
This was the way we were taught many years ago. Teachers had total authority and we were never to express our opinions. I had hoped times had changed but was sad to find they had not when my kids went through the same stuff. Parent teacher meetings are some of my best memories. I made it a point to ask questions regarding their teaching styles and actually had a few tell me it was their choice and not mine to question.
A contest entry
- ...When I was 5 years old... by Desire.
1221 points, ended August 2, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any suggestions and comments are welcome
Comments
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The title is a neat introduction and apt metaphor. The verse has a natural, freeflowing rhythm which I enjoyed. Indeed our educational system seems to teach pupils what to learn as opposed to how to learn. As you've asked for suggestions may I tentatively ask if you had considered the word "mould" instead of form? Form works well, mould may be more suggestive of the shaping /moulding, but maybe not, just pondering a perspective dear poet.
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Thank You!
Thank You for Your entry: Stay Within the Lines
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times ~
I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
You took the prompt and brought forth much for the Mind to feast upon~
Bravo!! When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~
Woven Strengths: Adore Your rhyme also the flow of this piece
While reading I kept being shown
Pink Floyd's - Another Brick in the Wall
You know also I am being shown Charlie Brown-
remember when the Teachers always spoke in that very
disturbing voice...of course could not be understood
Keep hearing that...
Your Message pulls and also seeing a ruler being hit on the desk
and children who are not understanding what the Teacher said-
afraid to ask-....
I am shown image of a Man standing before children however a
bright Light is behind him...so bright it is almost blinding
Making him appear Angelic like~ and the children are listening-
learning and loving the time there...It is like they are oblivious
to the stressors of Life...
however I am shown reference to 'God's children'...
Shown those words...
However that is to be Interpreted
Love the direction You took with this prompt
Hopefully my comment to Your write makes sense
Powerful verse and message You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
Just follow all our stagnant rules
Don’t think outside the box
Your thoughts will stay within our lines
Under rusted chains and locks
Vivid Imagery poured in these lines...
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice
also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Many blessings too 
with much love and light~ Desire~*~
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Thank you so very much. Your contests always give me cause to think a bit deeper.
Thanks for hosting and for the silver. I'm very flattered.
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