I can write on paper in the rain
and it will fall apart,
but I remember there was a day
I imprinted verbals on soft loam of my heart -
you manually planted a handful of letters
in each of those scratched slots
in September.
June:
(it thundered;
eyes were knocked out
and poetry of joy
ran down cheeks
into our mouths,
actually preserving ~
each word grew with seven leaves
into a bloomed conversation)
In a list
- Spelling it out keeps it special Honorable Mentions • next in list
- Nature • next in list
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A contest entry
- BWOM-Best Write of the Month, #4 with Starz of Heaven, aboomer and islekine by islekine.
1050 points, ended August 1, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Can You Win More Than Once? by MJ Forgives.
1218 points, ended November 12, 224 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow such a good poem. I liked it! I really do. No lets change to LOVE IT! I really do. I incredibley enjoy reading this poem. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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I like this. you have a way with words.
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Love the wording, images and depth in this - yes, was worth reading!
Nicely done!
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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Well I liked this
The only suggestion I have for you is please please make your I capital that has always bugged me for some reason great write you have much talent thanks for entering our contest be well. -
I really enjoyed your write!
It has a unique style...message is well penned...I loved
the line: but i remember there was a day
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I think this is sort of, kind of, dirty pretty? I am still not sure I understand it...so maybe not! Either way, thanks so very much for entering! and Best wishes in our contest and always! Hope to see you again!
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Thanks for wanting to understand, but this is about soil, downpour, representing growth of healthy dialogue.
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I meant I was trying to understand what
dirty pretty style is...not your poem...as I said message was wonderful...it's the format I was questioning..
Best wishes!
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I wasn't twisting for dirty pretty or anything, but sweet metaphor.
OK, to reiterate, soil, to me represents a new start occurrence (not in a muddy thought,) and here language simply sprouts up.
I enjoyed indicating only poetry,
bird at rose
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