I am a child,
Lost in the snow.
I am beaten,battered and bruised,
from the trials of life.
I am scared,
Of what tommorow may bring.
I am hurting on the inside,
Afraid to let anyone see.
I am depressed,
Crying where noone can tell.
I am reaching out,
But noone is there.
I am me,
Trying to get through another day.
A contest entry
- Tell Me Who You Are- CLICK HERE by MysteriousWhisper.
600 points, ended August 1, 30 entries
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thank you for entering this great poem!!
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I really like this.
I think we all feel like that sometimes, it's so true.
Nice write. -
this is honest and real and it seems like you are very self-aware.
but parts of it seemed a bit cliche to me and I would try to find another way to put them.
I like the ending though. it felt like...WAM. excellent
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SO HONEST AND OPEN
This my friend is most of us in this society of today
Each have their own reasons for being scared and withdrawn. I am right there with you in these feelings 
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You know this remaind me of a manga(japanese cartoon) called Vampire Knight , she is found at the age of 5 lost in the snow get attack by vampire get saved and remembers nothing of her past which is so cool,anyways your first lines "I am a child,
Lost in the snow". remaind me of that comic -
Poet
At times we are remiss and shallow but when the child is left to despair or when the heart feels so alone , can we not seek a kindness and understanding. Tears, at times, fall from these old blue eyes.
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Ok, and you are worried about me? You have manty to reach out to, me certainly included... but you must reach out...
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