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Toy

The second glance for confirmation
You’re too good for that,

A discreet consideration
But the outcomes flat,

A simple chance to tinker
With a different kind of toy,

Try another size on
More exciting than a boy?

Ignore the look of hurt there
The mat where you clean your boots,

Walk on and leave me standing
After all that’s what suits,

You may be the one that uses
Then drops me at the shore

Who am i?

The lost and hopeless little play thing
Of a whore

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  • Purple Eyes
    September 6

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    This is so sad

    The de humanisation allows not only the use of "the toy" as an object of pleasure but it is also what justifys the situation in the mind of "the toy".
    Being less than human it is surly alright to pick up cinderellas slipper, dance all night and then disregard it in the morning. Worse than that it seems to justify disregarding the slipper before during and after any interaction. Though the "discreet consideration" opens a window that there is awearness. Probably viewed as an inconvienient truth.
    The belife by the "the toy" that she is less than human is so sad. "I know im better than this, i shouldnt be treated this way, i deserve better but its okay im just a whore." Not even a toy, a broken once loved now disregarded toy. Seeking love threw the phyical interaction but at the expence of her dignaty and pride.

    I really really like this poem. Brought up strong feelings for me (i dont usually rant so much first thing in the morning). A really powerful moving piece. A very raw and uncomfortable subject yet you have written with such eloquence. Well done you.

    Thank you x


  • Little Finn
    August 24
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    Wonderfull write, what a great way to put it.


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    July 27

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    Another example of why I love reading your work. This is so powerful that I could feel the heartach within your words. Very deep. As only you can do.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • Swangrnv gold member
    July 25
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    powerful...

    wow, wish this was just a great write, instead it's a great write that's deeply sad..


  • Firequeen
    July 25

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    WHOA!!!
    holy shit
    this is powerful and hard hitting.
    the hurt oozed from the page as i read my love.
    you should never have to feel this way baby girl
    I love you

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