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Descry

Beware the scorn that haunts these walls;
dead souls reborn when e’er night falls.
Dark spirits torn from heaven’s gate,
recant and mourn when Satan calls.

The spells you’ve said to mediate
with living dead that suffocate,
has only fed the evil here …
and oiled instead the wheel of fate.

You think your spell will quell the fear
yet I shall tell the truth my dear.
Beware the hell that you invoke,
the keening bell will reappear.

You cannot hide beneath your cloak
and words replied you can’t revoke.
You must decide to heed my voice,
for I have tried to clear the smoke.

 

 

 

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Interlocking Rubáiyát:

The rubai (plural rubaiyat) is a Persian verse form. Each rubai stanza is a quatrain, in which lines 1, 2 and 4 all rhyme. The rhyme scheme interlocks stanza to stanza: aaba, bbcb. ccdc ...

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  • crivanea silver member
    September 10

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    cool!!! now i'm learning persian verse how many forms do you know ? lol...wonderful rhyme scheme in this one..with great flow and imagery as well nicely done!


  • Draig aine gold member
    August 13

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    congradulations on the greenie

    a very fine piece penned in strong terms and giving very apt advise your close was brilliant

    You cannot hide beneath your cloak
    and words replied you can’t revoke.
    You must decide to heed my voice,
    for I have tried to clear the smoke.

    blessed be


  • CrystalLizard
    August 12

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    I love the form you've chosen here--it's beautiful to read out loud, and I don't think the strict rhyme has hindered the substance and language of the poem at all. The whole thing flows very well. The point of view that you've chosen is interesting, and I like the cautionary, yet loving, tone of the voice. Thank you so much for your entry, and good luck.


  • awannabepoet
    July 29

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    Oh Amera,

    Mighty queen of Auburn Maine, let thine words descend for in all truth they do ascend perhaps even transcend that which once stood as a barrier, the whaling wall if you will. My thoughts do ponder if truly there is merrit in simply trying as opposed to being immersed in the fine art of verse for are we crossing into the great cultural divide that once made great poets and philosophers stand on sides opposed.

    Are we to be defined by that which we write if we seek to fill the pages with those things we never were, the things our hearts most desired, to roam, to be free, to settle on a cloud and travel without reprieve.

    I so wish I could lay my hand on the sands washed by those tides, the ones whom would bring me closer to emminent history, the absolute truth.

    Mankind and his ability to love is only surpassed by his ability to destroy and to hate.

    One day we shall have a common understanding and then and only then shall we truly be ready to share all that is given to this worldly earth.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • Ellis gold member
    July 28
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    These guys aren't vampires, they are just real bad humans, aren't they?

    Tiki Cat


  • pranj
    July 28

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    The spells you’ve said to mediate
    with living dead that suffocate, - this line says so much! Just another superb write from you! Loved it, both the form and the meaning! Very deep and very dark(the background too!! - just kidding!)


  • Desire gold member
    July 27

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    Holy Moly!!

    Oh My this is one Powerful verse!
    What a form penned also and I am falling in Love with it
    Woot!!

    Even with the Dark Poetry- You pen so Beautifully


    Excellente~
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~

  • Purrsanthema
    July 27

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    I like this, it's nicely and gracefully ghoulish. It has a soupcon of clever fire and brimstone peppered in the cauldron of warning for good measure.


  • SteveS gold member
    July 26

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    Cool....love this! The form is interesting. Never tried one. But this is just perfect. You are inspiring me once again.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    July 26

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    This is another of your works where the form commands the tempo and gives it the power of tribal drums.
    Adds another dimension to the words themselves.

    loved it!

    D


  • Ken-Maverick
    July 26

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    Cool take on the prompt buddy.
    Your rhythm and flow never ceases to amaze!!
    All the best to you in the contest.

    Ken


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    July 26
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    in context (contest), on message, not bad.


  • PerVirtuous
    July 26

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    Yes, love, you have always had the gift of cautionary tales. Once again you have spoken a deeper truth than I think most people realize. They rake this as just words and not as the much deeper truth that they are. That you know this makes you very special, indeed.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    July 25
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    Wow, loved this.

    It is so ‘Bell Book and Candle-ish’ if you know what I mean.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 25
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    I like this, but I need to come back. Not able to give it the attention it deserves.


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    July 25

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    Very interesting form. It reminds me of the Villanelle in some way.

    I like the composition and the contents dealt through the majestic lines of "Descry". A true poetic jewel.

    In respect and appreciation,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


    • Amera gold member
      July 27
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      Thank you for the comment. I'm sorry I can't rate it anymore and only the computer can


  • darkyinsoul
    July 25

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    Amazing as alawys my dear friend
    you do so well in your form tis impressive
    and your dark writes are outstanding
    well done poetess!!
    Thanks for the share
    Darky


  • Swangrnv gold member
    July 25

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    ASTOUNDING..

    I knew you were well versed in many forms, but i think this is the first Interlocking Rubáiyát i have read from you, and it's absolutely perfect..


  • Rovingone gold member
    July 25

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    Excruciatingly beautiful, a masterpiece. Your rhymes are always provocative to the imagination and you brought the topic to life in a most original manner.

  • J Macabre
    July 25

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    That was pretty awesome...i love the topic of hauntings and the supernatural. Very cool write here.


  • DesolatELifE
    July 25

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    I liked that rhyme scheme a lot, actually! The locking business just makes it better, but I like the way it reads very much indeed.
    If I want to, I will (hopefully remember to) do one of these tomorrow. To fit the criteria, or whatever, do I need to stick to 8 syllables per line? I think that's the best way to do it anyway, but I'd like to know the rules as 'well'


    • Amera gold member
      July 26
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      Thank you! There is no syllable count restriction with the Interlocking Rubáiyát. There does not have to be an internal rhyme either.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 25

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    OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH,

    I really like this, wish I had time to do one but I am swamped so bad right now it is not funny

    but yeah, very nicely done me cubbie!

    love ya

    Dad


  • Moonlightdragon gold member
    July 25

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    "yet ah, that Spring should vanish with the rose!" Omar Khayyam
    My lovely poet your words are the words of spring to my ears
    every line is a rose.

    Robert


  • StarEyes
    July 25

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    Sis,

    What a read this one is! I love the conversation here.. What a great job you did on this one! I certainly wish I could write this well! You did amazing with this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Legend silver member
    July 25

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    I have no intentions of trying to expand on the word Excellent so will end my comment here
    Oh wait thank you for introducing me to the word "keening" i looked it up now know the meaning
    Oh nearly forgot the EXCELLENT


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 25

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    Your rubai are always World class, your dark poetry is always World class, so I guess this must be at least Solar System class!

    Sophisticated language allied to masterly rhyme and flow with haunting contest makes for a great read

    Jeff



  • penman gold member
    July 25

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    Excellent

    You are always such a master of the forms. And it fits the prompt so perfectly. such great use of rhyme. Best of luck in the contest.

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