gutted,
pure absence, in the chest,
where the soul should be.
belief, or what they call hope,
has been made,
today,
a mockery.
a true test
what of, character?
is to go on
but to go on alone
or together as one
like you 'hoped'
is today,
an unanswerable question
Please tell me what you think
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a thought-provoking poem with a great ending. The second stanza is my favorite. Enjoyed the poem, good job.
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I like how you made pauses. Although it's a short poem, it holds its own, you know? I adore this. It's one of those poems that I'd love to tell you which parts Iadmire the most, how I couldn't have said it better myself, only to find that I love every line, every comma, every statement. You're amazing, as always. I hope you're doing well.
with love, JR
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Great poem....strong imagery..we can all certainly relate to..
those...bewildering moments..when damn....
life just took a crap on me of all that I had hoped for or believed...
you know when I took the time to stand back from it......whatever
was going on....sometimes were I need to get some other opinions and options
from people I trust...or stand back..and give the answers time to brew.
ears/Seattle
great write!
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captures well the feeling of having given oneself to another, then left lost and empty inside. nice write.
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I like the way a lot of this was a question and the way this really makes you think. Food for thought. I have to say today and tomorrow is an unanswerable question we never know what could happen in the next minute. Which is why we should try to just be glad for each moment, even though that is easier said than done.
Great write, hope you have a nice weekend.
♥
Jade
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