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daisy

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i

blouse licked
toffee coloured floor


and pretended not
to listen to whispers
of colour moving over
               their bodies

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

ii

he often took her mind
                     for a walk
along untouched sands

felt like
the soft light of sunset
between her toes

she
      almost dared to look down

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

iii

scent of daisies
laced her emotions


as if
       he sprinkled early summer
       around them
       each time she smiled

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

prompt: 'buttoned to summer' - perfectsunset


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Comments


  • birksy silver member
    August 13

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    very sensual language. well laid out, makes it very interesting to read. 'she almost dared to look down' was my favourite bit.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 3

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    So soft and stunning... love your
    visuals & metaphors. You really
    know how to set the scene..
    I wish this poem would go on
    and on.. it was very soothing
    to read. Absolutely love it.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • chilali
    July 26

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    great take on the prompt. amazing imagery and word choice. i loved it all. good luck in the contest

    much love,
    ylova


  • perfectsunset gold member
    July 24
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    Your prompt:

    (since you commented on this
    poem, and like these specific lines)

    is.....

    "buttoned to summer"


    By me ~perfectsunset~