A poem on my mind
She walks into mine
I know she is kind
She helps me unwind
Her Contest I find
to which I'm inclined
as I have opined
to after I've dined
leave my fears behind
and write what I've pined
to write; this is timed
coming at me blind
so now I am primed
not now in a bind
with points I'll be lined
not nickel and dime-ed
and I won't be slimed
for all will be rhymed
and all done and signed
--Ellis
A contest entry
- Just Rhyme II by shewalksintomine.
1550 points, ended August 10, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honest Opinion?
Comments
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Very Nice
Beautiful poem you done Ellis. I enjoy reading it
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What is there to say but purely joyful and entertaining. You obviously have an incredible talent and this is surely a crowd pleaser
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Nice to see you managed to work the name of the contest host into the poem and the title
Flattery can be a great thing. The mono-rhyme should definitely be applauded. It's so hard to stick with one sound through a whole poem. Kudos!
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Great! How did you fit in all those "-ine" rhymes? Fun one.
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Excellent rhyme and flow poet... well done... and had some fun reading it!
Best wishes,
Frogz~
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It's nice to see your poetry,
you have the key to set words free.
On your knee a cat, Tiki,
who has to be a mystery.
A wonderful monorhyme, a pleasure to read.
All the best to you in the contest.
Sue
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Outstanding
Is there anything you can't do in rhyme? I always admire how easy you make it seem. You really are one extraordinary cat! Best of luck in the contest.
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Oh, this is very fine, indeed, and it made me smile broadly... yes, quite a funny penning here!
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quite a rhyme.. leaves a big smile
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Ah!! , you've done it again.You always leave me with a smile on my face when I read your poems.Good luck.I hope you do really well in the contest,Ros
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i must say, you rhymed in time, with words that chime in this heart of mine. lol i love the monorhyme but find it hard to write with my own pen. splendid! good luck to you in the contest.
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Great monorhyme best wishes with this
Gaylene
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I love it!
Not only is it a perfect monorhyme--INSANELY difficult to achieve--but, they rhythm is perfectly uniform throughout, save one line with slight variation. Every line is one iamb followed by an anapest.
Line twelve switches the iamb into a trochee, which is an acceptable variation because it paints out the idea of blindness with a rhythm unnatural to the poem.
Seriously, this is impressive. You have an ear for rhyme and rhythm. I'm incredibly impressed, to be downright redundant. And, brownie points for incorporating the host's name!?!
Take care & good luck, & thanks ever so much for sharing this one!
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Well, I guess I'm flattered that you used my name as your title. And guys won't often admit when they are flattered so...good job, I guess?
Thank you for entering my contest. Good luck to you. Please refrain from rating or replying to any comment made by me or my lovely and wonderful cojudge(s). -
What patience! All those delicate rhymes! Are you sure Tiki Cat didn't write the whole thing?
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Well of course I did really write it.
Tiki Cat
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How very Kool! This is most likely the longest monorhyme I have ever seen and it actually makes sense! Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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I had absolutely nothing to say when I started out and did only to write something as a joke. I started with the contest creator's name, and I thought of every word that I could that rhymed with "mine" and used every one of them! writing the line to make sense with the use of that word. Backwards from using the word to make sense with the line.
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Great rhyme my friend. Best of luck in the contest. Sandy
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