You can see through my splinters and glue,
All that You see might surely be me;
What You do can affect all of man,
Each day You look at the things we took;
Hell's opening as bells stop their ring.
Loosen up my shell, pull me up from Hell,
And bring me closer to life's composer;
Maybe I can choose just where I will cruise,
So I might now live, when I'm through the sieve.
Just as I learn how much I can burn,
Earthquakes within tear away my grin;
Something inside shows waves of the tide,
Usually gone before I wake at dawn;
Salvation comes as damnation crumbs.
Loosen up my shell, pull me up from Hell,
And bring me closer to life's composer;
Maybe I can choose just where I will cruise,
So I might now live, when I'm through the sieve.
Sin's sabotage breaks down my barrage,
Pains from wasteland bury me in sand;
Inching my way past the dark of day-
Ramified soul climbing from the hole;
Shedding my skin to begin again.
Loosen up my shell, pull me up from Hell,
And bring me closer to life's composer;
I pray I can choose just where I shall cruise,
No longer captive, I'll move through the sieve.
Author notes
*Main Entry:
sieve
: a device with meshes or perforations through which finer particles of a mixture of various sizes may be passed to separate them from coarser one.
Prompt:
"Cellophane bandits"
thanks for all the comments guys. They have inspired me to enter this poem into a contest where I shall hopefully be published.
God Bless,
ZeInkslinger
- Christian poetry group group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Can You Win More Than Once? by MJ Forgives.
1218 points, ended November 12, 224 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything & Everything!!! by Sheilasbabygal4life.
700 points, ended November 10, 159 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think? What are your feelings and/or thoughts?
Comments
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This was a very nicely done piece. I enjoyed reading this. It was good. Very good. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.
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Really cool poem. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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With your nice poem you have pulled us up
From the hell of mean behaviours that make nasty an ordinary daily life which could be directed to be turn into the heaven of fruitful thoughts and curing imaginations based on powerful feelings.
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This was the first poem I've ever read of yours, but it was a interesting write.It made sense,you had a nice choice of words going along with it ,and you kept to your topic, I really enjoyed reading this.
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I haven't read your poetry in a while...and I"ve forgotten how much I truly enjoy
your imagery and thoughts!
my favorite verses:
Loosen up my shell, pull me up from Hell,
And bring me closer to life's composer;
I pray I can choose just where I shall cruise,
No longer captive, I'll move through the sieve
the beauty and pain of being ...human, raw and real!
powerful and beautiful!
I enjoyed it...
and thus our struggles and conquests magnificently continue
lest we be...merely..puppets on a string with no choices or tender verses to sing!
Loved your poem!
way to write!
ears
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Wonderful. I like the choice of words that you used throughout. Please continue to write.
Yours Eternally
~Winnifred Raven Evangeline Nevermore -
Thoughtful
Dear Poet,
Thank you for entering my first "Quickie" contest.
Unusual take on the prompt
Wishing you the best
until then
stay
liquid
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Poet
Perhaps you speak of the beginning of Armageddon and then the conming of the rapture. True our world is in a sad state & we can only point the finger at ourselves. It is kind of like the French revolution when the leaders created their own gods, Murder and chaos followed. The thing is now we have created man gods. One right there in the white house.
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