I want to disappear.
Fragment;
'til you can blow the dust to the wind.
Someone see me.
Its hard enough to exist,
and you expect me to live.
Please tell me what you think
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I found this very relatable. I loved how short it was. You said what you had to say in as little words as possible. A very poignant poem. The end was particularly powerful. Great write
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I loved it!
And I know how you feel!
Great write!
Liz
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nice
NO! I won't tear you up, because, you are alive. sorry, I got into the poem
How many times have I thought of myself so!!! But each time I came out. So, plz write an answer to this. or, i will do!!!
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Wow well done, very good write, short, sweet and to the point, my fav part is "Its hard enough to exist,
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Nice
I loved it
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Hey, you are simply amazing
Please check out my poems am nearly 14! -
very sad.. i hope its not true
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Powerful
This says a lot in so few words. I especially love the last two lines because I think so many people can realate to them in diffret ways. Great write! -
great.
i think we all feel this way sometimes. we all just want to dissapear from the veiws of the world, and co-exist with the non-existing. i've felt this way sometimes, just questioning how if we feel this way, how can people expect you to go on? how can they think so much of you while you just want to wilt away?
this is a great write by the way(:
short and to the point. but it sends a well known message, we can ll relate in some way.
good luck to you and your writing,
page.
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to dissapear wold be to hide away from all our problems! i would rather face up to them and jump over them like obstacles, then you can look back at all you have overcome and feel proud of it. Although i like the poem and we all do wish at sometime in our lives that we could dissapear, that the ground could just swallow us up!!!
Short write but very powerful i enjoyed it!
it gets the message across without too much waffling !!! i really enjoyed it!!!
you should write one on appearing into life now to follow this!!1
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I would love to just disappear!
short write but so much meaning & emotion.
LOVE IT
I really do like your last too lines. Well done & thanks for sharing with us xx
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I want to disappear as well.
But there are friends and family, and there is the world to prove wrong.
So I must exist.
I applaud for the shared relation.
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i think a lot of people can and will relate to this. so short but amazingly true
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you packed alot of enotion into a short poem. Congrats!!!
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eventhough it's a short poem but it makes me touch....
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its ahmazin!
Its hard enough to exist,
and you expect me to live.
Those are my favorite lines... makes me wonder what is this poem about??? I could make several guesses... But i'm afraid i;ll get it wrong, this poem is amazing one of the best i have read in a long time... -
i like how it's so simple. i really think that it's good
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Wow..haven't we all felt that way at times. Regarding the line "Someone see me." .....someone just did.
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amazing
This was short and sweet and too the point. It was very well written and you have a way with words and imagry. You are a great writer and i can all too often relate to what you are saying.
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Great
I really liked how this poem displays emotions with such creative wording. I really liked lines two and three as well as lines five and six. I think that you should make more poems like this one though in the future try to make them a little longer. Great work. -
Wow.... love those last lines, ties everything together. Overall very powerful. Shorter poems are much harder to write, because every word, every spacing, every punctuation, matters. Yet in this poem you show great mastery. fantastic.
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Very good.
Short but very punchy- get's the message across.
I agree with JoRoDo 11 22 , the line "fragment;" is extremely good as it stands out from the rest, and tells me exactly how you feel. -
Well done short, succinct, but right to the point with powerful meaningful words. The line "Fragment;" is very clever and unique. The last two lines are something that everyone can relate to on some level
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With the few words you've written it's actually very powerful.
And your ending couplet is such a good statement.
I love really short poems a lot, and I definitely liked this one.
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Beautiful write. These few lines grasps the powerful emotions that run though every single persons head, one time or another. Keep writing!
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This is so very simple, but states so much. You have captured raw emotion is such few lines. Very well write!
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