When distraught -- Cellulose sought council
From her shrink on what more she could do,
He advised her that having a baby
Might alter her sad attitude.
Her husband, whose nickname was Bandit,
Was a chemist from Kalamazoo --
So whatever would make his wife happy
Was the one thing he wanted to do!
Just nine months and a few days later
A daughter would make her debut.
Her claim to fame is the name Cellophane
And she clearly enhances our view!
Author notes
The key words for this contest were: cellophane bandits I dropped that "s" and took a stab in the dark to see if I couldn't clear things up a wee bit.
just love these quickies ...
A contest entry
- Quickie by liquidmindforever.
650 points, ended July 26, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
All comments are appreciated / answer in kind!
Comments
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good one...(LOL)! this quatrain reads like a limerick and deserves the top prize! a good read and it flows well. was it Frost, who was chided for using a rhyme-scheme word twice...? however, this is a quickie and stretching it a bit is acceptable! congratulations!
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Enjoyed your unusual take on this prompt.
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Love the humor in this fun little piece, Joy!
Congrats on the gold!
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Congrats on the GOLD
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Hurrah! Hurrah! Hurrah!!
Golden wit!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
M-C -
I love this. The humour is offbeat - made me laugh. A great take on the prompt. Your stab in the dark resulted in a very well written and funny poem. Congrats on the win.
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It's All in The Name
Dear Poet
Thank you for entering my first "Quickie" contest.
Layers and layers wrapt my attention unwrapped slowly with
ease.
Wishing you the best
until then
stay
liquid
finalist
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Cellulose begets cellophane, via the chemist. That was creative of you, making it into a tale. Hopefully others will see that. You know, telling folk that in your notes will let them see the creativity that went into this piece.
"Cellulose sought council
From her shrink"
I assume the use of the word "Shrink" was intentional. Shrink wrap is sort of like a cellophane. Well, if you look at it upside down and backwards.
The last line is cute.
Plus it is a fun poem.
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Quirky and imaginative - very well done!
Bill
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Shrink wrapped!
You are on a roll!
From Big Ben to cello---
beyond the norm your goal!!!
Yay, joy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
M-C
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Very well thought out my friend, nice and easy read with some clever bits of imagination at work here...the end result is clearly a cute lil' bundle of J
y
Jhn
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very clever play on words...
and an exceptional well done for a quicky that bought a smile to my thin, pursed lips... Top marks for a worthy of gold effort
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Your stab in the dark works for me I do so love a mind that goes off on a journey of its own to discover such gems
Wonderful
Good luck in the contest
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