When we are innocent
Young human flesh
And our dreams are so vibrant
And hearts are so fresh
The words don't run dry
The expressions of ardor
They pour from new souls
Pounding harder and harder
Enshrouded in fire
Most vicious of passion
That undying hunger
For love knows no ration
But the radiant beauty
Of young heart's first venture
Will be quashed and smitten
The soul flame's cold quencher
The next one is warm
But lacks the explosion
And when torn to pieces
Brings life to implosion
And with every occasion
One's stabbed by their lover
The words become fewer
The heart becomes tougher
But you cant live without it
Your soul is addicted
You hate it, you love it
You take it explicit
With each time you're demolished
Dies your pretty reverie
A demon of the heart is born
From love's ash and debris
And the venom brings a solace
An energy wrought in acid
A dark unknown to you unleashed
Demeanor cold and placid
Replace longing with bloodlust
Your supplement to malice
Devouring what's left
Of your fragile hear's chalice
So write the words quickly
Let them flow when they're tender
Before your heart's mangled
And soul has been rendered
Cause as soon as you've said them
And they fall to dust
And the muse you put in them
You taste with disgust
It seems the first time will take them
After that one has passed
I can't say them at all no
The first to have them - and last
Author notes
Premis (ik interpretation in my poetry can be tricky): The first time or two you fall in love it's so easy to fill journals and write letter upon letter, detailing your hearts every feeling to a pinpoint..
It seems that after you've had your heart stomped to hell a good few times.. They just never come the same after that..
A contest entry
- & I tasted beauty when you told me I wasn't human in your eyes by Re-invention.
580 points, ended August 15, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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yes, your poem has very rich metaphors that awed me completely. I can say that this is what the type of poetry I wanted to read. well done
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great write. awsome words. just flat out great. congrats
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Well done keep it up.
Amber
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Hear hear! Great piece. I liked the rhyming; it was amazing. The words used are vibrant and colorful and I am awed by them.
Furthermore, the words aren't silly little children's words; they're not afraid to be BAM about their meaning and interpretation in the piece. That was the biggest "wow" of them all.
I also liked the meaning behind the piece. It's clear, yet abstract enough that metaphors can easily be used to familiarize yourself with the idea. Great work, once again, and best of luck in the contest!
~~mydnyte~~
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